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i asked a child






“Who is God? I asked a child.

“The man who made the trees,” she said.

“The man who made them tall and strong.

He made them just for me.

 

He cries the rain to make them grow.

He loves them all you see,” she said.

“The Oak, the Gum, the Chestnut,

the Dogwood and Pine Tree.

 

He made the branches reach for Him.

And covered them with leaves,” she said.

“To give us shade and comfort,

and to show us different greens.

 

He made them so I could climb up high,

and all the world to see,” she said.

“That’s who God is. But He’s cross.

For we’re cutting down his trees.

 

Soon there’ll be none left to climb.

And the world we’ll never see,” she said.

“For if the trees all disappear,

there’ll be no more you or me.

 

For he made them so the Earth could breathe

And freshen up our air,” she said

“But we’re destroying our precious lungs

and the Earth will soon be bare.

 

 And God may shed a billion tears,

for the loss of you and me.” she said

But he’ll weep a billion squared of them

For his greatest loss – his trees.”







— judyanne, Mar 22, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

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Silent_Rain

16 years 2 months ago

Wonderful!!

I love this poem! I have always loved trees and thing of them kinda of a symbol for life in a way, you start at the trunk (as a baby) and travel till you get older and get to the branches, each branch is a desision that was mad and branches out of the trunk, and all the little twigs on that branch are things that came as a result to the first desision... Well i really liked the poem!! Although you might comsider takeing out some of the "she said", just a suggestion though... ~Rain~
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

nice to meet you rain

if you like trees and tree symbolism you might like my poem 'seasons' thanks for commenting. judy
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Skybones777

16 years 2 months ago

Trees

Thank you ...that was very nice...
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

hi

nice to meet you too thanks judy
M

magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Just great

This oone let me speechless and I just loved all of it to top to bottom. Great write of yurs my Jane gal. Love and hugs to you Mona xoxoox Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Judd

you just reminded me of something my son said when he was little .. thank you for that I had forgotten ... beautiful poem so emotive pulls on the heart strings made me tear up lol and that end with the trees disappearing I think I am with God environmental nut in my house is ME i am always recycling etc for my grandkids ;) your a born storyteller I love how you write love and big hugs JayCee x x x x OI OI OI
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

don't keep me in suspenders!!!!

what did he say? thanks for commenting and for your comment - such a compliment i was trying to make this one as simple as if from a child and kind of wondered about it even before rain's comment- do you think there are too many 'she saids'? love judd xxx
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Judd I hadnt considered that

Judd I hadnt considered that till you just said it .. but maybe if you tried 'and said' I will think on it and I will come back with some suggestions ... seriously love this one ... my son used to call hospital, hospidoodle and told us that the hospital car(ambulance) takes you to heaven in my family there are heaps of ambo's/paramedics ... and he asked my pop one day what is god like ? thinking he was taking all these people to heaven , funny things kids think off my eldest son and my daughter were the only ones with my mum when she passed ... they still remember and were only young my daughter was 3 and a half my son 6 , funny how reading things can bring back memories eh ? love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

that's what i love about poetry - or one of the things anyway

the way the poem becomes your own, bring up your own memories, visions. how funny - the hospidoodle that's sad about your son and daughter - very young - right there when she died was what you meant? what were and are their feelings on it, then and now? luv and big hugs back at yu judd xxxx
loved

loved

16 years 2 months ago

IF A CHILD ONLY KNEW

I AM A CHILD SUPPOSE URS AND MY ANSWER IS NO, YOU TELL ME WHAT ANSWER WILL YOU GIVE TO ME???????????? LOVED
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

hello loved

are you suggesting to me i should leave the 'she said's' in? lol judy
xena465

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

Funny you should say that

Funny you should say that you wrote it from a childs point of view. As soon as I got near the middle and then to the end. I imagined telling it to a child...nice Judy. I really enjoyed this one. Rosina xena465
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

thanks rosina

i'm so glad you enjoyed it. thanks for the lovely comment hugs judy
chumfin

chumfin

16 years 2 months ago

i just called to say , good write.

i loved every bit of that poem. it is very touching and , oh my God, i just love the poem. i will still come back to it. its a great work from . chumfin
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

thank you so much chumfin

i'm so glad you liked it. i like your work. i hope you don't mind my little suggestions. may i call you chum? that's also aussie for mate? lol judy
Tim

Tim

16 years 2 months ago

Judy,I’m not returning

Judy, I'm not just returning the compliment as they say,I promise,but I do love this poem. It really appeals to me that it's God seen through the eyes of a child. Good stuff. Tim
chumfin

chumfin

16 years 2 months ago

you are welcome

thanks for your response. like i said earlier you suggestions are well appreciated. if you call me chum, its OK. thanks for complimenting my works. chumfin, oopps! chum(((((laughs)))))