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Either or

Indifference unsheaths its bitter sword
As Mercy gathers her ruinous horde

The Joker jests in courts of jester
The King he laughs at mistress lecture

Envy fancies his mouldy coat
As Pride recites the songs he wrote

Clairvoyance struck blind~ her vision beneath
As Deceit he grins through rotton teeth

As Doubt drinks from the bitter cup
Pride will empty it~ then fill it up

Vision blinks~ eyes full of sand
As a Lie and Fear walk hand in hand

As Grace and Courage wilt beneath thier crowns
Mistrust adjusts his crooked frown

Forgiveness finds her new cold shoulder
As Lust instructs the way to hold her

Guilt it hides its footsteps past
Remorse withdraws~ its path is cast


Death he hides in sunsets shadow
As Birth alights upon dawns meadow


— club special, Mar 21, 2010

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Country/Region: Colorado

Favorite Poets: William Blake, Poe, Yeats, Crowley

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HO

Holy Oaks

16 years 2 months ago

I like the vocabulary and

I like the vocabulary and personification of the characteristics.
CS

club special

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks, when I wrote this

Thanks, when I wrote this poem I had my Oxford dictionary out. "Personification of the characteristics" is a great description I what I was trying to achieve.. Kind Regards, Club Special
M

magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Outstanding

Rythm and pattern was excellent for my first read of yours, I enjoyed the flow and of course the wording hit the spot. Nice to meet you here on your page. I will offer a couple of tweaks here if you so wish, let me know and I will respond back if you so wish. Will visit again. Great poem Magics02
M

magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Outstanding

Rythm and pattern was excellent for my first read of yours, I enjoyed the flow and of course the wording hit the spot. Nice to meet you here on your page. I will offer a couple of tweaks here if you so wish, let me know and I will respond back if you so wish. Will visit again. Great poem Magics02
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Brian

Seventh set of couplets ... 'their' mispelt and to be honest I offer no other critique I love it how it sits ... five stars and a nom congrates on spotlight Smiles for miles love Jayne-Chloe
CS

club special

16 years 2 months ago

I have no idea how I earned

I have no idea how I earned spotlight, Or how it works but thank you all very much, this poem is from my upper self of my collection. Thanx a million Jayne, Club Special
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 2 months ago

Amazing, great, awesome. All

Amazing, great, awesome. All of those cliches fit, but don't do this justice. Spotlight well earned. And a great splash you are making here club speacial. I thought you last line ended bluntly, I am not sure if you were going by sylables but I thought if instead of "upon dawns meadow" would somehow sing better as "upon dawns fair meadow" But I felt amazing flow right until then. Loved it. Worth all five stars and earning spotlight. Congrats. Julie D.D.
CS

club special

16 years 2 months ago

Mand I have seen some of

Mand I have seen some of your poems . I have to go through one every tomorrow because its some of the best stuff i've seen on here on this site. LOve Club Special
CS

club special

16 years 2 months ago

Thank you Annie, Your

Thank you Annie, Your insight is top notch (I love that word) but I wouldn't be here if I didn't love words. Best regards, Brian ~~
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Hi Brian,Highly interesting

Hi Brian, Highly interesting and laudable poem. Well done! ~A don't forget to change their. Words must be used like stepping stones: lightly and with nimbleness, because if you step on them too heavily, you incur the danger of falling into the intellectual mire of logic and reason. - Balsekar