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The loving mind.

Music playing in deaf ear, I abandoned much. Unkempt is her love, I delight in her touch. Who stops at red light, all fear departs. Not this luckless jester, confesses, to false starts. Careers with face forward, discards stop sign. Jaw cut and now scarred shall she be mine. No peeking over shoulder, as rocks start to fall. Lovers song pitching louder, plucking at gift less moll. Who needs you’re warning, I have notes to play. Alfred’s cakes are burning, history of another day. Soon the silence bellowed, haste lost, faltering on check. Footsteps so politely followed, now a shouting wreck. The time is cruel. teaching, will o wisp was she. The mind lost, beseeching, every pain to body, is free. free.
— Roscoe Lane, Mar 21, 2010

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Region, Country: Scotland, Ayrshire land of Burns.., GBR

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Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Roscoe

this one is a little hard to follow and I believe with a couple of small tweaks ... it would make it much easier to read ... the kind Alfrrd Cakes are you refering to the actual cakes that Alfred the great baked or the Fungi ?? there is a poignancy thats lost in the translation an edit would make all the difference imho love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

16 years 2 months ago

I'm sorry,

As a young man i thought i was in love, and it turned out wrong. This is me thinking back, we split and i could not concentrate on anything. That i hope explains what i was trying to achieve, you obviously go about as normal, but you just feel nothings sticks. So if it seems rather scrambled sorry.Thanks for your comments. Regards Roscoe...