leaping forward

In depth. Soul searching maybe? Whatever, it is very interesting. I enjoyed reading and I think it turned out well. I do hate how you have not used capital i's, lol. Thats my only whinge. Dont beat me up now, lol. Well done E. I will chat soon. Love Lyz. XX

Thanks for your quick explanation at the end. It was very helpful. Here is what I liked about your stream of consciousness poem. First the rhyme scheme was very creative. It echoes of some Welsh forms. “Serenely running through one’s self” is a great concept. And the last line is profound. I’m sure you meant it to be. This would be a great poem to do some editing. The idea of self searching is deep in our psyche. So the theme is important. Could be a really good poem.

Dear Z., It's quite captivating. The battle of the spiritual warrior is always with the self. I think you should keep the small i, because in some studies the small i represents the ego while the capital I represents the I Am. It all fits perfectly. P.

I loved this one, all these stream of poetry is wonderful I read Cats the other day hers was wonderful as well love and hugs Jayne-Chloe

You get 5 for that alone Ziggy the part I am unsure of is Realizing the fabric that i dwell in i can stand near recent failing without fear of it This is a little too ambiguous for me...it is the word fabric I think ,I want to think physical with that word and I know that was not your intent. Seabhac

five stars and a nomination for this poem. Favorite stanza: The world can wait as i stand on the mouth of eternity, leaping forward a panoply in effect, animated beyond belief holding now that what was always out of reach. but I absolutely LOVED the last line! Always, Cat

I really like this one Ziggy. I often feel that we are misjudged and when put down in hurtful words they can stab you like a knife. Rosina xena465

A lovely worthy poem . Can i add u as a buddy Loved by all

You must let your pen free again and again this was a great lovely piece from your ways and your heart, I hope to read more with this emotion in them as you reach out to that beutiful place, Yours Ian.T

i really loved the depth that is in the wonderful piece. chumfin

((((((Ziggy!))))))) If it were not for the brilliant title, I might have made the suggestion to write the poem without the beginning ing words--which imo removes the strength in words. And that last line is definitely a keeper. ;-) ~A Words must be used like stepping stones: lightly and with nimbleness, because if you step on them too heavily, you incur the danger of falling into the intellectual mire of logic and reason. - Balsekar

well, what can I say about this masterpiece, this is sculptured perfectly and creates the images and feelings without any shadow of a doubt. This is currently my favourite piece of yours. This stirred up some feelings I have had inside and these lines were as though you read them from my churning mind: The world can wait as i stand on the mouth of eternity , leaping forward a panoply in effect , animated beyond belief holding now that what was always out of reach. I did laugh at your American spelling of 'Realising'! nice job my friend, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".