Seren

Mar 20, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

of unknown origin

I shouldn't be here
I am removed in everything,
see within the seed
of unknown origin

I am like a cherry blossom
blooming out of content,
a blood red orchid
persisting in fields
of white petals

after the burst into flower,
I regather the petals,
and see nothing like self

I am,
a wildflower
of unknown origin
flourishing out of context.

and in the pagoda
a lotus smiles

— Seren, Mar 20, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

i think this is my new

i think this is my new favourite. Absolutely adored it, jaughter. ...and in the pagoda, a lotus smiles...how superb! ~A p.s. I would change one or the other context into "content". Words must be used like stepping stones: lightly and with nimbleness, because if you step on them too heavily, you incur the danger of falling into the intellectual mire of logic and reason. - Balsekar

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

I like the idea of changing

I like the idea of changing one of the context's will look at that today when I name this ... smiles ... I love that you love those last words you know why ... it was YOU who showed me no matter how different I am there is a reason ;) and the lotus smiles knowingly (((((((((((((((((((hugs)))))))))))))))) love you Jayne-Chloe

Nordic cloud

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Jayne with the beautiful mind.

Ann of Norway "a blood red orchid   persisting in fields  of white petals" You blow me away on the wind, yourself a bloom so red and full of love in the field of white oh so wonderful, so so so so so so so so so...........................! Amazing, stunning, beautiful. Spring is almost gone so now this silly old tree decides to bloom..........................Buson. Not quite the same but I thought of it when I read this. Love you Ann.

Nordic cloud

16 years 2 months ago

operatic red and your voice sings out to the heavens,

Ann of Norway And I add more, Our Joe also said "WONDERFUL" when I sent it to him straight away. Jayne you stand here in full operatic red and your voice sings out to the heavens, we all give you a standing ovation, this choir of white, not blushing but adoring, you please the Goddess, Lotus, Queen of art's aesthetic utterances, she marks your verse and secretly persuades the King of Kings, to wed, the earth the sky they meet and sense your soul complete. Oh this poem catches our essence and pulls us towards the pure and lovely, the odd and innocent, the strangely out of place, the ugly is made into sublime beauty, you have that wand I mentioned long ago, it still is yours and in your hand writes wonder after wonder for our minds to travel on, and on, and on and if we're lucky we might hold your hand in some other place of grace. This one hits a spot and will not leave, the spot of red where our quick is smitten, flows, its wonderful again. Only Ann

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

As earth meets sky the

As earth meets sky the eternal flame blazes in your heart a white hot flame of life licks the profound walks above the ground your burn finds the niche in our hearts slipping within the folds nestling to make a home your words touch me Ann never more so than today this poem was very personal ... but I love how you see it your vision is so clear and your spot on with how you see it for its the same way I saw it in my mind as I wrote it love you dear lady and can you please let Joe know that I am naming it as he suggested ... I love that title Love to you dear one Jayne-Chloe

kowque

16 years 2 months ago

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xena465

16 years 2 months ago

A beautiful poem Jayne.

A beautiful poem Jayne. Just like the flowers of the earth. Rosina xena465

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Rosina

Thank you for your wonderful comment ... this ones about my acceptance of self ... its very personal but I am very happy you liked it love and hugs Jayne-Chloe

Geezer

16 years 2 months ago

Austrailian Orchid...

The beauty of your mind stands out like a red orchid, in a field of white daisies. You are here because it is your Karma, that compels you to seek out your own kind. And where better to find others like yourself, than the place where you are?Cause and effect. Did I make any sense? ~ Gee

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Gee

YOU made perfect sense my dear man ... and your so right on the money it scares me lol ...in a good way, sometimes I reveal more than I intend and your words ... jesus you nailed it in one comment .. I can exist in a world that does not see or I can be a orchid out of context with the world but in essense understood by the other flowers you see me better than some I like that my friends here can see me (((hugs))) Much love Jayne-Chloe Higgliest bugs

Geezer

16 years 2 months ago

I find...

that there is always a reason for being where I am. I knew the minute I logged on to Neo. for the first time, that this is where I belonged. When I saw all the people here that were putting their minds on the site, I knew I was among kindred spirits. Your words on the screen just spoke my language. You were among the first to see that I was a friend. I love my Neo-family, and you are a big part of it.I have seen you grow as a poet, and a friend. The flower of your mind, is what I look forward to, whenever I come here. Higgest bugs of all, and much love, ~ Gee

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Biggest Smiles the flower of

Biggest Smiles the flower of my mind wow never had my mind described as that but thats beautiful dear man ... sorry I didnt reply to this yesterday ... my emails screwed up and I am waiting on a new computer to come, my mail client keeps resetting so I have to reset it and it takes forever ... the computer should be here in the morning was delayed by something was meant to get it yesterday ... but they said wednesday fingers crossed they get their finger out I remember when i started here I felt overwhelmed at the talent here but soon found there was a place here for everyone no matter their skill level ... I love Neopoet and the friends and extended family I have made here ...you being one of them love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

Geezer

16 years 2 months ago

Flower power...

I too, felt overwhelmed at the level of talent here, but found, like you, that there is a place for everyone. I guess that the friendliness of the people here, kept me coming back, and made it feel like I was a part of the whole thing. Something bigger than just me. Yeah, I know about waiting for something. I am waiting for my new glasses. Supposed to have them in 7-10 days, but it is now fourteen. I am getting the ones with graduated lenses, no more lines between the different vision parts, and increased versatility. With just the tilt of my head, I should be able to see whatever distance I need. Well, off to see about parts for my car, #$^*ing prices for them are ridiculous! Love, and higgest bugs, ~ Gee

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Gee

LOL you sound like someone I know ... parts are always getting more expensive hope you had some luck I have to get new glasses this year the ones I have are nearly stuffed lol I have trodden on them they have fallen off the top of my head so many time I am clumsey with them but you wouldnt know they dont look mangled(not yet) thank god lol the people here ? I dont have words there are so many beautiful people here ... sometimes wonder what i did before I came here btw I wrote some lyrics for a song some friends of mine are going to lay it down on a demo disc I will share the lyrics when they say I can pretty heavy stuff lol cant wait to see what people think I am going to post as a poem ~! love and higgliest bugs JayCee x x x

poetrylove11

16 years 2 months ago

I love the imagery here!

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear PoetryLove

Thank you glad you liked it smiles kind regards love Jayne-Chloe

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

I have always loved flowers

I have always loved flowers Annie two grandmothers who were mad gardener's and my Dad is 80 still going hard at it ... I don't mind getting out in the yard myself I mowed the lawn yesterday to everyones disapproval lmao got in all sorts of shite but it made me feel good to get outside and be doing stuff Love and light Jayne-Chloe

R.M.Shanmugam

16 years 2 months ago

poetical. superb. shan

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Shan thank you so much for

Shan thank you so much for your kind comment superb I will take any day hugs love Jayne-Chloe

panaella

16 years 2 months ago

when are you going to get published?

You are so clearly talented JC, Elegant, effortles...your stuff just flows. Of course I'm completely envious! Seriously, inspiring. How do you manage to produce so much work????? Ells x

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Ells

The contract is at the solicitors lol ... fingers crossed sometime later in the year I will be in print, I am getting a friend from Newcastle whos also a poet here to do my cover art ... some home grown talent (BossCombat) is his moniker here hun I didn't know I had it in me till I got here(I've written privately my whole life never sharing it) and it was Neopoet that made me the writer I am becoming and a handful of constant friends and advisers that were very generous and kind with their time ... I had a thought today going to share it with you ... I believe everything I have written to date is like the scum of the top of the milk , I dont think ive gotten to the cream yet ;)lol love and big hugs of thanks Jayne-Chloe x x x

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

That smiling lotus

Like a cross legged guru floating on water The Lotus sits and watches and retains the joy of the unusual. Now was that Lotus white or pink? I enjoyed the journey in this one Jayne Seabhac

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

I like to think that smile

I like to think that smile is because the unusual becomes accepting of itself noticing the universe smiling back ... unique but still relevent white Lotus Liz ... thanks for your comment I am so happy you enjoyed the journey and thats what it was love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x

pamela

16 years 2 months ago

smiles

Dear S., Made me smile big. Excellent job! P.