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club special
Mar 18, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Crimson River

Arise! From the red rimmed river
           Unfurls its wings in Its minds eye
           Folding stars into blackened sky

           Spirits leap while conscience weeps
           Mothers cry as reason sleeps

           Colours fade as the lie is borne
           Fidelity kneels, its fabric torn~

           Twilight hangs the setting sun
           Death becomes darkness, everyone

— club special, Mar 18, 2010

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Country/Region: Colorado

Favorite Poets: William Blake, Poe, Yeats, Crowley

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Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Club Special

Bloody hell ... this ones short but absolutely packed with meaning ... one of your best so far ... seriously cannot see anything I would change only thing I wouldnt have finished were you did those two stanza's sound like a prelude to something else ;) theres another poem wanting to be written kind regards Love Jayne-Chloe
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 2 months ago

I really like it, nice flow

I really like it, nice flow and feel. Good post. I can't find anything to suggest either, but I can see why Seren said it was waiting to be expanded. Thanks for sharing. Julie D.D.