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'Thirty pieces of silver'

Betrayal was a game I never wanted, to play  but as anyone can tell youI can learn 'long the way as the weapon's are drawn don't be living a dream  and think its unnoticedyour piss has no stream for the multitude of people you have tricked before  I am now the wrathwaiting silent at your door please don't be worried I give back whats received  when you find that's nothingjust remember I believed in the middle of the darkness I stayed all the night  returning you to comforttill you forgot all your fright  now that the truth is out I find I'm quite calm  but the message in my eyesis making some alarmed  in the silence of my mind in the halls of my heart  emotions have all fledadmiration's fell apart but I wait in a minute as your wising up  I'm ready, armed and ableas daylight reveals sunup as years have traveled one thing eats my craw  its injustice to the weakI guess its my flaw but I really couldn't give a fat rats arse in hell  bring your best to bearits time to ring the bell  I know that you lurk as a shadow of life  come and play betrayal my words are my knife
— Seren, Mar 18, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Critiques

C

CyberSpace

16 years 2 months ago

rotflmfao @ your piss has no

rotflmfao @ your piss has no stream, when your angry your cutting brilliant poem love hubbyxoxoxoxoxoxox
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

LOL glad you liked that line

LOL glad you liked that line it just came from nowhere and I cracked up when I wrote it (hugs) thanks love wifey x x x x x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Double hubby’s rotflmfao,

Double hubby's rotflmfao, and raise you some knives. I love my kid. Mummy Words must be used like stepping stones: lightly and with nimbleness, because if you step on them too heavily, you incur the danger of falling into the intellectual mire of logic and reason. - Balsekar
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

And I love my Ma lol that

And I love my Ma lol that line as I said above was an inspiration lol and I couldnt not write it I feel sooo much better now (hugs) and love JayCee x x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 2 months ago

Must be the season!

Just a couple of tiny, teeny stumbles, but it added to the image of being so pissed that you couldn't see straight. Whew! I wouldn't want to be her, within arms reach! Your piss has no stream! Sounds like something a 'tough old salt' would say! You kicked my ass with this one! Higgest bugs and Lotta love, ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Sir Gee

I have already done a little ironing of the poem, so I think maybe those couple of stumbles you mentioned are fixed but I am going to take another look at this later on and tighten it up ... lol tough old salt you reminded me of my gramps then he used to say something similiar love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

loved the piss having no steam line

reminded me of the saying 'don't piss on my back and tell me it's raining' great angry write JC. this particular person must be really feeling the vibes. lol judd xxx
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Judd

LMAO I know a few people say that as well ... this is the second of the writes the third one takes on a whole different tone i will let you judge it tomorrow night but yeah I was furious and I have my writing to vent these days so I let it all out on the page love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Jayne-Chloe

My favorite line is the same as everyone else. Love that line, but tell me what has you so hot and bothered? Love, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Cat

I think that lines my favourite as well lol it was a friend that let me down and it really hurt so rather than railing at her I did it on the page and sometimes the deception and betrayal is too deep, surfice to say shes no friend to me anymore love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

p.s.

Just to let you know that I answered your e-mail, in case you didn't get it. It just occurred to me, that you might not of received it, while I'm sitting here waiting for your reply. Love, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Cat

I am getting a new laptop on monday they seem to think its this one playing up and I am still in my warranty period will catch up on all my emails when that happens, till then I am flying blind here not sure whats getting comments etc ... but all will be fixed on monday YAY lol ~! love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

You were right

When you get wound up ...oh ohhhh. My favourite line was my words are my knife i think this one could do with tweaking a bit...some of the words tug a bit, not quite as smooth as the last one for instance I am now the wrath waiting silent at your door I want to say silently at your door , I falter at this but I don't know if it is much better...the words just need polished How do you feel about it ? Seabhac
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Seabhac

They are my other favourite words in the poem ... I feel better and the third poem takes on a whole different tone the journey of my anger if you will and the end ... best therapy ive ever had writing lol I get it all out on the page now love Jayne-Chloe x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

If the treasure I seek is

If the treasure I seek is not of gold I shall not drift out of a havens hold but I shine all my words and I place them with care cause writings my passion I lay it all there thanks for the comment Eph lol love and hugs JayCee x xx
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Do you mean John Everett

Do you mean John Everett Millais Ephy ??? lol they maybe havent seen anything yet the first three hundred poems where just getting my voice polished and my lines straight now to get the words in right places ... then I shall me a happy camper lol (hugs) thanks for having confidence in me Eph( I often lose it) love and hugs JayCee x x
xena465

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

You go get them Jayne.

You go get them Jayne. Sounds like you're just in the right mood? Rosina xena465
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Rosina

That mood has passed huni ... gone like the wind but sometimes you have to vent and venting and ranting in poetry if its done well can be wonderful cathartic heres an exercise for you next time someone ticks you off take that rage and focus it in your head and stare at the page and let it all out ... for a first time i would stick with your comfort zone of rhyme I think you will find it flows ;) love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 2 months ago

Stumbles...

Just that you go long and short rhythym, from verse to verse. The old salt-term came from my Granny too. I heard her slighty older sister swear one day, and my gran said to my mother, that she swore like an old salt. She did too! ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Gee

going short to long would be the ebb and flow of my anger I guess sometimes these things just write themselves and this one came very soon after Judas Kiss thanks for the critique hun I appreciate your honesty will have a solid look at this one shortly and make it sleek and smooth from the tongue love and big hugs Jayne x x x
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 2 months ago

I had only heard the tiny rats arse!!

Ann of Norway This reminds me of an earlier one of yours, the lurking by the door rings a bell, but that doesn't belittle this one in its entirety, the swearing gives it potency, but it didn't grab my heart this one, just me I expect. Its style seems a little more pedestrian than your later ones; I just have to be honest, I am not so fond of it as other of yours. Love as aye Ann.
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Ann

LOL I may have used that line somewhere before with close to three hundred poems I probably have lol ... your honesty shines my dear friend never be fearful to not like something not everyones going to like everything lol but this one is going in for a small edit to smooth out the cracks and fissures love you Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Annie

Lovely write ? lol some would say different glad you liked it though Jayne-Chloe
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Brian

Sometimes I steer them sometimes they steer me this one you got on the money My first write Judas Kiss was driving itself this one I drove and will fix up the small errors in rhyme shortly glad you liked it love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Alex

The Spoon poem is nearly finished lol I got caught up in writing this series when I post the last one tonight will fix the spoon and stir it into stream in the next couple of days .. good to see you back love JayCee
arja

arja

16 years 2 months ago

..that is a very strong

..that is a very strong piece! full of rage.. based on the comments below, that feeling is long gone..I'm glad it is, but look at what it has made you write..at first when I read the title, I thought this is something familiar.. but this is totally different.. I enjoyed reading it!
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Alone

Thanks for the comment the feeling is gone but still fresh lol and no this is something very new glad you liked it love Jayne-Chloe
arja

arja

16 years 2 months ago

LOL…well keep ‘em

LOL...well keep 'em coming, i'll never know what to expect from your poems..honestly! hugs Alone97
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Alone

That makes two of us ... I never know what inspiration is going to hit me and then Bang it hits me and theres another poem lol sometimes wonder if inspiration runs out and we only have so many poems or stories in us lol love Jayne-Chloe btw do you have a name or if your happy in your screen name ?
arja

arja

16 years 2 months ago

..i believe each person does

..i believe each person does not run out of inspiration, some just choose to shut themselves from reaching out..others find everything in life so overwhelming that the ideas just freely flow from their minds & heart (or sometimes even soul)..but there are others who end up not knowing where to start or what comes first.. I think you belong to the second, while I sometimes linger on the third or first..LOL! ;) hugs and kisses, arja a.k.a. Alone97
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Arja

Your right in your what you say i am the second but I am the first one as well ... I shut myself out from 'life' because of number two lol the overwhelming part .. you have a beautiful name I wont forget that in a hurry nice to finally have something other than alone to call you ... alone felt well so alone lol (hugs)and kiss love JayCee x x x
L

lyz

16 years 2 months ago

A great Bitch

I did laugh at some parts but hey, credit where credit is due. What a mood miss, hope all is well now. Chat soon. Great write. Love Lyz. XX