Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

The True Story of Lillian Rosendale






Lillian Rosendale

owned six bankbooks

bequeathed her by her father.

They totalled forty-four thousand pounds.

 

She looked at her books every day

running loving fingers over the figures.

Never spending a penny,

she dressed in rags and ate scraps

left over from others’ plates .

 

A stranger’s path fate had her cross.

He entered the same cafe Lily was meandering

looking for scraps, other’s leavings.

Ordering two rolls he went to a table,

drew some white powder from his pocket

covered the rolls with it,

then heartily ate one.

 

Ignoring the other he left.

 

Lillian immediately moved to his place,

ate the second

while holding her bankbooks tight.

 

Suddenly someone called

a man was dead.

It was the stranger who’s bread

Lillian was eating.

A sad and lost soul, the powder was toxin

he’d bought with suicidal intent.

 

Lily too had been poisoned,

and dropped dead on the floor of the cafe.

The bankbooks she had been lovingly caressing

lay on the floor beside her.

 

He died outside,

She died in.

 

 

— judyanne, Mar 17, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

More from this author

Critiques

Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

OMG. What a teaching tale

OMG. What a teaching tale this is. Awesomefuckinggorgeous. I should introduce you to Pete Sierra a friend.. http://awakefiction.wordpress.com/ http://cerosoul.wordpress.com/ http://groups.yahoo.com/group/enlightenedfiction/ I'm going to send him this poem. U2 would be good friends, I'm sure. ~A "To love another person is to see the face of God." Les Miserables
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

thanks anna

your response suprised be as i didn't really pay much attention to form, just quickly dashed something out to submit. i think it needs a lot of work yet. lol judd
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 2 months ago

So precious this life in the NOW.

Ann of Norway The tale with the sting in its tail, how potent when so short in a poem, where the précis is total, no waffle, and the message strikes home terribly and powerfully, specially in this one, almost a Zen feeling, like Babettes Feast by Karen Blixen (Alias Isak Dinesen) of Denmark, but not the death of life there just the death of understanding. Tales where they have the reason at the end and surprise us as you did here judyanne. Love to you judyanne from annanya.
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

love to you annanya

needs work i know, but a good story i agree. the true ones are usually the best. love judyanne
C

Clem

16 years 2 months ago

content and style

Poems have two elements, the content and the style or form. The content of this story is so moving that the form fades in importance. The title said it was a true story – that’s the best kind. I liked your wordplay between figures and fingers. IMHO you do not need to say she was a miser. The story already says that. This is a really good piece, a keeper. Thanks for sharing.
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

nice to meet you CLeM

thanks for your comment. i'm aware, as you say, that the form needs work, i just wrote it out quickly to submit. since it has been met with some interest i will probably spend more time on it later. thanks for reading judy
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

hi kal

true story - i heard it somewhere - cannot remember where, but informed at the time it was true. thanks for visiting. did you see my admission of incorrect numbers of the holocaust? lol judy
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Judd

I live for the day ... tomorrow isnt here yet so in my humble little mind it doesnt factor into anything anymore my views have changed over the years ... brilliant poem lovely love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

i live for the day too JC

that's why i never have any money !!!!! did you receive my e-mail with the Neruda poem you asked for? love and hugs right back at you judd xxx
Kailashana

Kailashana

15 years 12 months ago

Right about now, I’d love

Right about now, I'd love to have even one bankbook. There is a balance. Homelessness is not a good option. ~A "Even if I knew the world were to end tomorrow, I would plant an olive tree today."-- Francis of Assisi
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 12 months ago

ditto

thanks for re-visiting anna love judd xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

15 years 12 months ago

Dear Judy

It just goes to show, that you can't take it with you. An interesting story. Love, Cat
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 12 months ago

thanks cat

haven't got it let alone try to take with me love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html