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DawningDaytripper
DawningDaytripper
Mar 16, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Its all in your head

Hello my name is fear

I used to have another name

once upon a time I knew it
 

Now I just consume a day

what day doesn’t matter

I have lost all perception of time

only the coo-coo striking the hour

hints at life’s true passage
 

Resisting change from a primal cell

surrounded by white washed walls of doubt

behind rusted iron bars of denial
 

I understand I am not welcome

sometimes hiding behind my front door

or playing along

I have the guise of an uneasy smile
 

But you know don’t you?
 

They know too
 

Sshhhh... we shall hide together
 

　

　
Julie

D.D.
 

— DawningDaytripper, Mar 16, 2010

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Region, Country: Robe valley, WA, USA

Favorite Poets: All of them, for differant reasons. Neopoet poets have influenced me the most over the last 2 plus years. Great teachers. Edgar Allen Poe, Dickens, way to many to list...

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

One of your best, Julie.

One of your best, Julie. Truly. Brilliant actually. ~A "To love another person is to see the face of God." Les Miserables
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks Anna, wonderful

Thanks Anna, wonderful compliment. I will be sure to pop in on you later and return the kind favor. Greatly appreaciate your read, time, and the compliment. Julie D.D.
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 2 months ago

leaves us smiling and we want to explore yet again

Ann of Norway Oh this is wonderful, with all in its expression and the humour at the end leaves us smiling and we want to explore yet again what it was you said shhh about. I agree with Anna one of your best dear Julie well done.
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 2 months ago

Two heads...

hide better than one. I really like the little twist at the end. Are you writing about someone who suffers from the mental disorder that leaves them unable to go outside? I think they call it, Agrophobia? It sounded like it. At any rate, it was a real good piece. ~ Gee
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks Gee, the disorder

Thanks Gee, the disorder here is more general than agoraphobia, but certainly includes it. Agrophobia is but a symptom usualy of other things. Fear of change, addiction. Agoriphobia is but the final manifestation. I have had this one soaking in my brain for awhile and have several people who have inspired me since getting the idea, specificly Rosina had a piece on agoriphobia that got me thinking and then thier was another fear based peiced that I am forgetting at the moment. Fear it universal, its just how disabling is it? Thanks for your read and time, glad you enjoyed it. (((HUGS))) Julie D.D
xena465

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

I love this one Julie it

I love this one Julie it describes me. Many times I hide behind my door and sometimes it would be nice to hide with someone else like me to keep me company in my misery, perhaps I wouldn't feel so alone. This deseves recognition. Very well thought out and written. Brilliant *************** Rosina xena465
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Rosina I am so glad you

Dear Rosina I am so glad you liked it. You had a had in the inspirational side. I doubt with out reading your agoriphobia it would have been the same. So double thanks from double dee! Julie D.D.
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Richard

16 years 2 months ago

I very much like...

...the playfulness of this, Julie...how you've turned "Fear" into a living, thinking, talking being all its own, and how together you have developed a relationship where you actually converse and hide out with one another...quite imaginative and totally original in my mind's-eye. Normally, I prefer punctuation to guide me through another's work the way they meant for it be understood, but your phrasing and line breaks seem to make the lack of punctuation quite acceptible. From my experience, that takes a knack few possess. I know many would be able to relate to this one. I know I do...lol! A truly thought-inspiring original, Julie, and I wish to most gratefully thank you for sharing your unique craft... Big hugs to you, fine poetess! ~ Richard
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 2 months ago

Well unfourtunetly me and

Well unfourtunetly me and fear are familar Richard, I am so glad you liked it. And I tend to break my poetry in line with punctuation. I always have leaned that way but Its actually something I learned here from greats such as Nina, Rett, Ann. To many more to name. And it does take a talent, but in my opinion it can be learned. What I learned was punctuation distracted from the words so unless nessesary, try to leave it out. But some just require it. I thought your first post with punctuation was a great post. I thourghly enjoyed it! Julie D.D.
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Julie

Like the mad hatter I am late late late but THIS ? is your best that ive read brilliant poem and my new favourite of yours :) love Jayne-Chloe
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 2 months ago

Oh you make me blush, sorry

Oh you make me blush, sorry about being late to respond. Busy busy. But I am so glad you gotta chance to read, and liked it. Your the best'est Julie D.D.
Mark

Mark

16 years 2 months ago

It's a killer Julie

It is so true. How to exorcise the fear when one can't speak of it, make a truce with it..hide it? It is impossible to hide the truth if it or it destroy one. Shhh me and fear have a secret.. Awesome ! Mark Resilient Flexibility
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 2 months ago

Glad you could get a chance

Glad you could get a chance to read and am estatic you even liked it Mark. And fear has always been my cohort. So I am glad everyone was able to catch the announcing and tense it was delivered in. Thanks. Julie D.D.
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Mariposa

16 years 2 months ago

Cool!

I love the personification, the first and last lines, of fear speaking...and it truly does describe this disabling emotion. Wonderful job! -Jhena
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Skybones777

16 years 2 months ago

i Love it… You make Fear

i Love it... You make Fear Look like as if it were Child looking for trouble. these are words of truth "Resisting change from a primal cell surrounded by white washed walls of doubt behind rusted iron bars of denial" its the fear inside that makes walls? Peace ...Later8^)
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 2 months ago

SKYBONES, you sly dog. Good

SKYBONES, you sly dog. Good to see ya! And think of it more as a cell and the walls make sense, a cell of fear. Commenting, look at you go. See I told you it would be fine! Julie D.D.