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arja
arja
Mar 16, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Ode To The Lost

dearest love,
be not irritated,
you may not perceive
this wholeness
I present,
for it is scarcely
waiting...

oh dear,
touch me
if you dare,
caress this numbness,
having been lost
in this sentimental labyrinth
of perplexity...

my dear,
listen if you care,
hear my heart
breaking in silence,
having altered time
just to find you
with someone else...

dearly beloved,
it is immoral
to further love you,
compromising
the lives in between,
we must concede
& end this uncertainty...
— arja, Mar 16, 2010

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Region, Country: Makati City, Philippines, PHL

Favorite Poets: Unknown poets who reach out and be heard through crafted words, that are pieces of life..

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Ladderwords

Ladderwords

16 years 2 months ago

This poem reminds me of a

This poem reminds me of a letter written about love in Rilke's collection entitled "Letters to a Young Poet". In the letter Rilke talks about how young lovers, who do not yet know themselves, have only lived half lives, and as such are only half people. He continues to state that because of this, when two half lives get together in an attempt to make a whole life, the act is immoral because it is doomed to failure. A failure symptomatic of each part not knowing its whole self. I feel that lines in your poem echo with these sentiments of Rilke. I found these lines "having altered time/ just to find you/ with someone else..." intriguing. Was it the subject's time that was altered or time itself? I believe the later to be a more surreal and yet an infinitely sadder statement.
arja

arja

16 years 2 months ago

Hello! :) Thank you for

Hello! :) Thank you for taking time to read and comment on my poem.. I would have to read about Mr Rilke's Collection "Letters to a Young Poet", which sounds interesting.. ;) ..about your querie on the time altered, i guess it depends on the reader because I wrote this kind of confused (imaginatively)..but I agree with the later..capturing the sadness I was aiming for.. :) Thanks for the comment, its great to hear anothers prospective on a piece like this..
xena465

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

Sounds like a typical man

Sounds like a typical man with a beautiuful girl right there waiting to be rushed of her feet. Maybe he needs a bit more obvious hits to get his butt in gear Alone. Rosina xena465
arja

arja

16 years 2 months ago

..yup just a typical man and

..yup just a typical man and a lady in waiting..but there is more to it..ever fell in love with a guy only to find out his actually married? ;) I was actually..sort of..imaginatively playing with that idea..hope to hear from you soon.. Thanks for always being here and for your comments, love them all..
arja

arja

16 years 2 months ago

Hi Ms Ann of Norway, first

Hi Ms Ann of Norway, first of all Thank you for adding me to your buddylist, second its with utmost pleasure for me to be called by you as "Mountain Sister" (with BIG HUGS).. third, Thank you for taking time to connect with this piece! :)
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Alone

bravo nothing more needs said Kind regards love Jayne-Chloe
arja

arja

16 years 2 months ago

Thank you very much! ..I

Thank you very much! ..I always thought there was something missing, or could it just be me?! ;) Thank you very much!
Alice Ember

Alice Ember

16 years 2 months ago

Nice

Thats a really nice poem Alone97. now I know why i've gotten better with my poetry. It's because you've beenhelping me. thank you for everything. Love, Alice Odi et Amo ( I love and I hate)
L

lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Take a bow

Adored these words. XX
L

lyz

16 years 2 months ago

No need

to thank me, you are very talented and I love reading your work. Just keep on writing. XX
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Alone your not alone

Hear my heart breaking in silence...wow that one hits home for me Alone> I just loved the way you put this all together, I felt it alot as I read it twice and the flow, the words, everything about it was as lovely as you are and you know I just love that picture of your flowery face. Will be back, miss you in chat ... Love Magics02 arn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
arja

arja

16 years 2 months ago

..oh magics02/Mona, i know

..oh magics02/Mona, i know in my heart I am not alone..for I have you guys here with me..Thank you so very much! :) ..i'll be visiting chat soon, hope to see you there when I get there.. hugs to you!