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Let's undress (in the dark)

I have got a special gift for you
I've recorded some of my favourite tunes
"I know it's over" from 'The Queen is dead'
I also "feel the soil falling over my head" (sometimes)

Shall we listen to them drinking fizzy pop
Or something stronger, I'll see what I have got

I love the way
With your hair you play
So sweet
You look your best
In your lavender dress
Worn for me

I chose these songs so carefully for you
And included The Beatles 'Love me do'
Laid on your bed, my arm draped over your chest
Finally, against your lips mine are pressed (at last)

Our tongues entwined to 'still life' by Suede
Would you like some vodka with your lemonade

I love the way
We slip under your duvet
Feel my heart
Now I'll look my best
When I get undressed
BUT IN THE DARK! 
— Millage, Mar 14, 2010

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J.Thomas

16 years 2 months ago

From one smiths fan to

From one smiths fan to another. I enjoyed this. Soundtracks are always fun when remembering a night.
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Millage

16 years 2 months ago

Thank goodness....

.....someone else has 'soundtracks' to evenings. Unfortunately, this evening never actually happened. :-( Thanks for reading my work and I will check out yours also. Keep in touch fellow Smith-ite. I'd love to know what other music you are into? Much love Millage x
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Millage

16 years 2 months ago

Sincere thanks...

....for taking the time to read this. I love the way you mention how women undress so sensually. Where as I probably kick off DM boots, and whip off a Decapitated T-shirt as quick as possible.....with the lights off, of course! :-D
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Mile Man

I loved this one smiles love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
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Millage

16 years 2 months ago

Hi JC

Thank you sweetheart. It was very enjoyable to write and for those few moments in my mind, I had a whale of a time. :-D Much love Millage x
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lyz

16 years 2 months ago

OOHLAHLAH

Crack me up you do. I love it and the tease, well done. In the dark, what have you got or haven't got to hide, lol. And as all are on about the music, love all kinds but I am still laughing over the light off. Romantically teasing then mood spoilt when you stop to flick the switch. Love it. Haha, Lyz. XX
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Millage

16 years 2 months ago

Take it from me......

.......It's best if I do undress in the dark! :-) thanks for reading Hun. Nice to hear from you again Darling Lyz. Much love Millage x
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lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Nice to hear from u

Stranger. I will catch up soon, too much going on. I love this lighthearted poem of yours but I wont comment on the reply of, best if u do get undressed in the dark. Lol. Take care and looking forward to more. Love Lyz. XX
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panaella

16 years 2 months ago

The Smiths...

You have great taste in music...and the theme is delicious. I enjoyed reading this. Ellie x
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Millage

16 years 2 months ago

Why thank you Ellie

That is very kind of you to say so. I appreciate you taking the time to read my work. As for my taste in music. Some say it's rather warped! Carcass anyone? ;-) Much love Millage x