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Seren
Seren
Mar 11, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

shiver the night

how does the night
seduce me
in his ebony suspension
over and over

how could a child of ivory,
crave serenity 
in total darkness

I watch my skin
marshal geese,
a shiver whispers
up my spine

I burnt the cello
rasping strings
till their dark dance,
encouraged a stars birth
and the sky glimmered life

I dismembered a violin
on platinum dunes of dust,
eclipsing the face of Venus
that never failed to turn,
now braided in glass

I am,
the beating drum
that serenades twilight,
the flute that trembles
birds to flight,
lifting the saffron veil,
between this day
the next

I live with this knowing,
I will never be free
cutis anserina move me,
over and under
she rises up
to whisper her secrets

dawn is coming,
as maypoles of ribbon-ed light
play the sunrise melody,
archangels gather

glancing over his
shoulder, teasing to
cavort with lovers
the world over

Don Giovanni
(night)
in his ebony robes 
consumes me,
I am torn,
into darkness

as fibrils of light
a breath out of reach

— Seren, Mar 11, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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C

CyberSpace

16 years 3 months ago

as fibrils of light a breath

as fibrils of light a breath out of reach speechless love hubby xoxoxoxoxox
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

There is no poem that is not

There is no poem that is not your own! I bow to the sunrise and the sunset that births you. ~~~* "A poem is never finished, only abandoned." ~ Paul Valery
M

Millage

16 years 3 months ago

Yes, YES.....

..........F*CKING YES!!! Love it babe! Really do. Much love Millage x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

LOL you just made me

LOL you just made me remember the scene out of when harry met sally lol hahahaha thanks for that fucking awesome compliment hun lol this ones about my love of night ;) love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

I can see a orchestra of

I can see a orchestra of many visons in this delightful poem Jayne, even though I have to stumble on some words unknown to me, which for me isn't hard, but I still feel pleasure and flow in this poem. Rosina xena465
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

I was listening to a piece

I was listening to a piece called 503 which is instrumental and I think a couple of the instruments crept into the write lol was like making music of night ... thanks for your lovely comment love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Theo

I am a bit of a tease, and 503 what can I say? Hans Zimmer does it for me ... that piece can pick me up when I am down , a surprise for you I used to sing Opera ... many years ago before I changed genre's Don Juan has always caressed my Ivory's I also play the piano if you didnt know , a am an apprentice at many things a master at NONE lol ... but I love music and poetry and love it even more when I can combine the two together thanks for your wonderful comment you made me smile moons :D love Jayne-Chloe (hugs) Psssst nice to see the new pic and the smile
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Serene:

The music of the ears and the music of the soul, sound and meaning mingle perfectly in this poem of yours. You didn't become a violinist or a cellist, but you became one of the best poets I know, including Kailashana. I like this poem. Sincerely, Hugo
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Hugo

I am speechless at your very very kind comment thank you so much ... it is appreciated, I have only improved with the help I have received here kudos to Neopoet ... love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

Hans Zimmer… 503

Hans Zimmer & Joshua Bell... 503 http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BunG5Li8Bjc Angels and Demons, (though Angels and Insects is a movie unlike what one might imagine..) "A poem is never finished, only abandoned." ~ Paul Valery
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Mum

I have some news for you my darlin lol and for a change it is good :P message me when you see me online tonight will share the news sweet dreams darlin love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Cat

Me too ... thanks darlin love Jayne-Chloe x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Seabhac

Thank you coming from you that means a lot to me love Jayne-Chloe x x x
WW

Will Wright

16 years 3 months ago

symphony of night

Lovely, cute, witty. Night as a seductive lover, nice metaphor. A lover who leaves with the dawn - clever. But tell me - come dawn and your lover (Don Juan, the night)has gone - how does that leave you feeling? Eager for his/its return?
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Will

I already told you how I felt lol I am torn, into darkness as fibrils of light a breath out of reach there you have it smiles love Jayne-Chloe
Z

ziggy

16 years 3 months ago

hi

WOW wee what a write this is something else perfect flawless and well done ,,,,,,,,,,,ziggy
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Ziggy

Hey its been a while since I seen you around ... hope you posted something will be reading tonight ... thank you for the wonderful comment ~! dont know about flawless still needs a couple of tweaks but I will leave them for later on love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Alex

Big smiles ... thanks for your comment hun will be round reading tonight so will keep an eye out for something new from you ~! love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
M

magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Beautiful one Serene

This poem is a song of beauty for its words are of heavens and the flutes and harps and the cello's I can hear it and now if you and Andrea Bocelli can do this duet together in Tuscany Valley now that would be the hit of the year. Very very good lady of song and poem Magics02
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

If ever I got the

If ever I got the opportunity to sing with Andrea I would definately be singing something operatic hes a favourite of mine ... tuscany valley now your teasing, I cannot wait to visit italy one day :P dream me a poem Mona you might just have love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
M

magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Yes I so love the man..My Andrea Bocelli the Magnifico Maestro

You know my life long dream is to see Andrea in concert. I almost had the chance to do that but missed it. I will always look for that second chance in hopes it might come. There is something of the way this man moves me, the cds are just powerful to me and I shed a tear or two sometimes on some of his music as it makes me think of my Grandmother and Grandfather and the lovely town in Italy they were born in. This songwriter singer is my favorite and when he sings with Sarah Brightman, Time to Say Good Bye it chills me as this is my fathers favorite song. Can you play any of this on your piano. I would love to hear it someday as I also all my life wanted to play the piano and never took the time to learn it. I guess that musical inspiration was brought to me from my father who was a jazz drummer all his life. You sing too? You should write a song and compose it the whole way through, you never know where that could land you also as alot of poetry indeed is lyrics to a beautiful song. Maybe you can do a melody for us in spoken word? Hope your feeling better by the time you get this message. Magicsmona:) I will think on that poem too!!
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dream me a poem lol you

Dream me a poem lol you already did ;) Here is to you catching up with Andrea one day Mona ... I saw him in Melbourne in concert was the experience of a lifetime the man sure knows how to put on a show I am also a singing teacher have written songs etc all my life but mostly lyrics for others music ... my strength has always been in the words .. I am going to load a couple of songs onto the net eventually but lol dont think the site would like me singing in spoken word though I have one spoken word poem from way back when ... you take care love Jayne-Chloe
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

So lucky of you

Oh that is great did he have any singers along with him on that concert and did you get his autograph or any up close pics of him/ I know you must of loved this concert as I know you love the music. Yes please let me know when you load those songs on the net I would love to hear of them, okay. And yes do another spoken word when you get around to it and I will get with you as I have been having a wee bit problem to doing mine on here. I see you say that winter is coming and our spring is coming too as right this morning the birds outside are singing their tunes as the wind is still howling its messages. LOL I have a little nest in the tree every year momma bird lays her eggs at exactly this time of year and then when babies are born it is the cutest sounds, I know then spring is here for the new birth and all that it brings. Love Mona
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Yes he did there are a few

Yes he did there are a few Youtube videos of the concert in melbourne it was August 2008 unfortunately I didnt get close enough to speak let alone get his autograph ... now if it was José Carreras I would fight to get near him that man has the voice of an angel love his work its freezing cold here tonight raining and windy I am about to go to bed I think winters making her presense known early this year ... you enjoy your spring I am a spring baby and its my favourite season ... and thats september for us love JayCee
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Patricia_legacy

16 years 3 months ago

Seren

This is a beautiful poem Seren. Loved the idea of the instruments. Bravo Pat
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Pat

one day I aim to write a poem that combines all my loves together, well I have already started it lol its four pages long ... but know its one I will be working on it for quite some time to come lol thanks for your very kind comment hun so glad you liked this one love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
loved

loved

16 years 2 months ago

i perhaps did

I perhaps did comment On this wonderful poem Alas I don’t see my script, Perhaps someone erased it. Twas one of its own kind Perhaps someone did mind, A non poet how dares that one Comment on you Like an aura the only one Whose words of love praise And freedom do amaze, All and everyone And as I stand In the witness box, As a poet I sure am no one. LOVED
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Loved

Bow to you and your lovely verse what a wonderful way to converse Thank you for the kind comment love JayCee
VX

Venus x

16 years 2 months ago

The night is my friend

The night is my friend also **Smiles** I LOVE this Jayne!! I can't add anything that hasn't already been said Beautiful, heart felt pen.....Kudos!!! I am just wallowing in the light of darkness. ;-) Love and hugs, Venus xxx
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Venus

Big Smile back atcha Venus lol I lurve the night its 2am now its pouring rain and its windy and winters definately on her way time to unpack the winter clothes early for us to be honest lol so glad you liked this one its one I worked on quite I bit before it was ready to post... thank you for the visit love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x
VX

Venus x

16 years 2 months ago

Goodness....LOL

Goodness....LOL It sounds like we are in the same place, except reversed time zone **Grin** Pouring rain, windy with spring in the air and not winter, thank heavens...lol time to pack the winter clothes. I think it was 4:00 am when I finally went to bed, Night time is my sanctuary, the place where I find the most peace. Much love and Big Hugs right back at you, Venus xxxx
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Venus

You got that right even our water swirls the opposite way to you guys, down the drain I mean lol it was quite weird the first time I visited new york as a child and realised that the water goes the wrong way lol I wasnt very old lol winters here the last few years have taken on a chill we havent experienced before maybe I am getting old ? lol I got to bed at 4am last night too we are mirrors on different sides of the planet by the sounds of it smiles for miles night is where I find my serenity I have four kids so my days could not be described as calm ... though today they are all out lol wooot quiet as a church here at the moment love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
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panaella

16 years 2 months ago

It's been said before...

Can't think of anything original to say about this...the ending is a masterstroke...would just like to see more on this theme. Ells x
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear P

I think I can safely say I have written the night to death its one of my favourite topics that and the universe I am a avid stargazer have a telescope lol have another poem not quite ready but if you liked this one I think you may like the other one ... thanks for the visit love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
OK

old friend of kurt

16 years 2 months ago

WOW!!

Wow!! Music played in my heart while I read this. Awesome write. Truly compelling, and ever-so-inspiring. Keep up the excellent work. Sincerely, old friend of kurt
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Kurt

Why thank you ~! for the wonderful compliment if you heard music thats what I was listening to when I wrote it lol not lyrics just instrumental ... I will endeavor with the next one I am working on love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
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Orphani

16 years 2 months ago

A seduction of words. Your

A seduction of words. Your passion for beauty in your art, music, nature, and life are always presant in your compositions dear Jayne of the stars. I love this stanza. It's so you. love B I watch my skin marshal geese, a shiver whispers up my spine
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear B

thank YOU so much for taking time to read this one I worked on it for a little while till I was happy with the result still needs a couple of smallish tweaks but its nearly there ... my passion for art and music and poetry is one I am trying to combine in one poem but together they are not easy this one combined poetry and music the next step is to combine all three ... love and hugs Jc x x x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Eliabeth

I must apologise profusely my emails been crap for the last week and I didnt realise you commented on this one thank you so much for your kind words love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x