Candlewitch

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Sparrow's Spell

Sparrow's Spell

dull drab feathers
of small sparrows
undersized unimportant
seemingly so
sweet songbirds
of symphonic serenade
overlooked by the oblivious
too many to mention

— Candlewitch, Mar 09, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more., Candlewitch

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Critiques

poewriter58

16 years 3 months ago

Cat

Simple but it says much. How many people do we know that would fit this profile? meets all requiremnts that I can see Chrys

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Chrys

*sigh* to many to mention... Love, Cat

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

says so much

true cat, you have a wonderful insight into the sorrow of ignorance. love it, love you judy

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Judy

Thank you. I am a fan of the down trodden, the overlooked and the underdog. Love, Cat

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Dear little sparrows, so

Dear little sparrows, so beautiful and unappreciated. Rosina xena465

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Rosina

Yes, they are sweet little songbirds and truly unappreciated. Always, Cat

Lunegirl

16 years 3 months ago

Love it Cat,How true!

Love it Cat, How true! Magpies and vultures! succinct. love vix Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

Hi Vix

Thank you for the read and comment, lol. Always, Cat

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

Sparrows are the focal point of this months contest on Neo. But I did enjoy writing about them. I even learned a thing or two as I looked them up in order to be informed. LOL, I think Mark can hold his own. Thanks for reading. Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years 3 months ago

HI

HI CAT good to see you writting for the comp, i think its says twenty lines and i am only up to fifteen on my efford i enjoyed this ,,,,,,,ziggy

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

Hi Ziggy

I think it says up to twenty lines, five of which must have alliteration. That means the poem must be at least five lines and you may have as many as twenty lines. Good luck with yours. I will keep an eye out for it. Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years 2 months ago

yes your right cat i

yes your right cat i realised that later this still reads well ,,,,,ziggy

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Cat

overlooked by the oblivious too many to mention ... that line says it all great entry into the comp good luck ~! love and hugs Jayne-Chloe

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

Hi Jayne-Chloe

Thank you. Love, Cat

Wafi

16 years 3 months ago

Cat, This Is Beautiful

Cat, this is beautiful. I liked these lines a lot; "overlooked by the oblivious too many to mention" Deep insight in these short lines... Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Wafi

Dear gentle soul, thank you for reading and gracing my page with your lovely comment. Always, Cat

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

When they sing

it is because a soul has been released from "the guff" (the hall of souls) and they can see it descending form heaven to fill a newborn. (from the seventh sign) The smaller form is so fitting for the tiny singer. Unimportant to many I think too but not so to me, just a bit insignificant in looks (deceiving) Mark FlexAbilities

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

Hello Mark

Long time no see. Ah, but it is good to see you now. "The Seventh Sign" I haven't thought of that movie in years. I guess it is time to dust it off and rewatch it. Thank you for the read and comment. Always, Cat

loved

16 years 2 months ago

my views

so brief so intense lovely words choosiest/choicest ones we all must adore loved another poem scomments were they ok Glad I read your poem By a stroke of error That’s my admission You were writing about nocturnal I thought otherwise But I am glad I read you And learnt from others’ comments That you’re the best Would you mind the comments? From a non- poet That’s me? Though called by all As loved Forgive me for the error If it be. Loved

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

hello Loved

Thank you for your in depth comments. I enjoyed reading them. Always, Cat