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so beautiful

so beautiful the night cries
shooting stars,
these are breathless minutes

I bear mere moments
of Ecstasy, for a thousand
hours in torment

forever forgives the bane
of man, but eternity remembers

I embrace each stroke of love
abhor the slight of hate,

life was ever so beautiful
my night cried,
I seep into the sands of time
in a shimmer of satin tears

I release a star to love

— Seren, Mar 09, 2010

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Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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judyanne

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

what can I say?

I can only say the usual - beautiful my aussie friend. love and hugs judd xxxxx
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 3 months ago

So beautiful....

That I had to read it a couple of times, because it was too short! Only, did you mean, [sight] not slight? Star, is right! This deserves them. hig bugs, ~ Gee.
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

Of the night, only the star

Of the night, only the star is reborn, its light takes 186,000 miles per second to reach the human eye. No one ever questions why. ~~~~ "A poem is never finished, only abandoned." ~ Paul Valery
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

I question it every night I

I question it every night I look through my telescope ... wondering at the beauty if it and your poetry .... Love Jayne-Chloe x x x x
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

"Catch a falling star and put it in your pocket"

Ann of Norway "Catch a falling star and put it in your pocket Never let it fade away save it for a rainy day" Oh and you are out fishing dear Jayne in the great wide dark sea of the sky, and catch your stars in their thousands, like the shimmering of the plankton deep down in the oceans, and the sand grains of their beaches where you become one with the whole universe of love. As Anna says love is all that matters in this world. Love you too Jayne over and over again. Ann.
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

I just want you all to know

I just want you all to know I appreaciate your wonderfully kind comments ... I write for all of you ... each and every one of you are stars in my eyes ... I am blessed and know it Love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

That’s a very nice thing

That's a very nice thing to say...you're the star in our eyes too Jayne. Great write. Rosina xena465
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

I would be a shitty poet

I would be a shitty poet Rosina if not for Neopoet ... Ive been here twelve months in a couple of days oh how the times flown thanks for your lovely comment love Jayne-Chloe x x
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R.M.Shanmugam

16 years 3 months ago

i sleep into …..satin

i sleep into .....satin tears. a memorable line. shan
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Shan

I thought I left a comment here thank you for your kind message love JayCee x x
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

Just a deep sigh

If you were hear to hear the deep exhail which this delightful poem proveked you would know it has worked its magic. Thanks Jayne Seabhac
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Seabhac

Thank you for your kind comment hun I am glad it worked its 'magic' love Jayne-Chloe x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Lenny

Big smiles thank you for your kind comment Love JayCee x x