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lou

Mar 07, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Navel

I look to the sky

wonder why life goes by, sigh

i study my navel

— lou, Mar 07, 2010

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Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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16 years 2 months ago

hi

Glad u liked it.

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Lou

Nice little thoughts .. I believe could be expanded on ... kind regards Jayne-Chloe

16 years 2 months ago

thanks

Hi thanks for the nice comments. I was attempting to write a Japanese poem called a Senryu, which means that it needs to be 3 lines that total 17 syllables. lou x

M

16 years 2 months ago

Agree with Jayne

Yes go for it Lou expand on the navel. And no we are not talking apples and oranges. LMAO Go for it on this one, I will be back soon xoxoxo Love, Mona Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.

16 years 2 months ago

HI

I'm not sure I can expand it is supposed to be, 3 lines that add up to 17 syllables, as it is style of Japanese poetry called Senryu.

M

16 years 2 months ago

Yes I see that now

Leave as is and I will have to try one of these some day maybe with your help too. Love, Mona Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.