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Don't Let Us Fade Away

Fog and temperary mist
Is intriguing while it's there
But the morning loses to the noon
Becoming unseen air
And I saw the sinking sun
Biggest star of the sunset show
Let's not be like that- over and done
Dear,never let us go

I saw among the rolling plains
Sunlit antelope and herds of buffalo
Though in a dream-so real they seemed
They were shot dead years ago
I bought you a dozen red roses
To mark our " one year today"
I love you, and all I know is
Dear, don't let us fade away

— Jesse.D, Mar 06, 2010

Critiques

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magics02

16 years 4 months ago

Just lovely

That is all I can say to this poem. Everything flowed great, the imagery was beautiful and the wording just right!! Good job here today. magics02 Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
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Kassie

16 years 2 months ago

awwwww!

Oooh ... reading this poem was like watching one of those romantic sitcoms and then when the guy does something really beautiful for the girl the audience in the background goes awwwwww ... heehee thats what it was like for me ... really beautiful. Lucky girl =)

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