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sunscreen
sunscreen
Mar 05, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

It was her

She stole my heart,
then tore it apart.
Saw it from the start

Mental, and physical
she abused me
used up all my heart

Nothing left to have.
She wanted more,
cutting my flesh.

Screams erupted
Blood on the floor
Pain in my core

Dragging me out the door
She muttered and cussed.
Eyes of hate, tears of blood

Still wanting more,
She Stript me.
Removed my everything.

When asked of  the tragedy,
I could only respond.
It was her.

 

— sunscreen, Mar 05, 2010

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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Sunblocker whats up?

How is that and is that a real life poem? I got stuck a little here around the line Nothing left to have.. I will come back to this one after I think about it more. Promise lobe magics02 Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

lol good guy by golly

Yes and how true your statement is. there are many men in this world that go through horrendous mental and physical abuse at the hands of a female, your a hundred percent correct in that. People would not believe it unless they sat in a courtroom when man and woman giving testimony and the things that people do both men and women is beyond words. Alot of times it breeds out of pure jealousy over the new lover, wife, girlfriend, boyfriend, its just crazyyyyyyyyyyy... I won't go there right now as I am on a sick sabatical from it all. lol It will face me bright and early with my coffee on Monday morning so we will let this rest for the time being. This is a good write and never let a woman mistreat you in any shape or form, if you can help it. Get out early before it's too late.. Love to you sunblocker Peace, Magics02 xoxoxoxo
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

In a way female abusers can

In a way female abusers can be worse than men. Even a man built like Superman can be kicked, beaten and mentally scarred. You've heard the expression `The big man with the big heart`, well they're usually so gentle in kind, and are potential targets for dominant controlling females...well expressed...I like your understanding of this, especially if you've never experienced it first hand. Rosina xena465
sunscreen

sunscreen

16 years 3 months ago

Only the mental and

Only the mental and emotional, I've never be physically attacked by a woman, however a friend once told me she had every intention of stabbing me a couple times, for the way I had treated her, which was a huuuuge misunderstanding all together.
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Well listen up to the advice lol

I know even as you are smart and young just the same, abuse comes in many forms, actions, words, mental can be just as bad as physical sometimes in most cases I work with it is both. Some folks can turn suicidal when the stress is just too much to bear. And then some act out the threat and kill. Just get out and run like little red riding hood running in the forest lol You will learn alot the one who blogs as you are of a tender age still like my Joey/ Hopefully you are able to speak about your most personal issues to one that shares your concerns ab and leads you in the right direction, I seem to feel you are a very smart and and feelings of which you go through as teenage life you guys and gals go through alot of growth this time in your life. Peerpressure etc. You seem to be a very smart young man and I know you will be some great something in this world for you carry the charisma and love that not most teenagers this day and age carry. Proud of you keep up your mentoring and keep up the writing for sure. And dont forget to always wear your sunblockers. Love you my sweet friend, magics02 xoxoxoox
sunscreen

sunscreen

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks for the acclaim Ms

Thanks for the acclaim Ms Mona, I do try my best, and I always have shoulders to lean on. I have had my suicidal thoughts just like everyone else, but I'm also very vain, which counter attacks them, because I believe that I'm so great, and that I'm going to live forever.
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

You are so great,,I love that

Your a gem of a friend and smart to boot also, keep that cheery disposition about yourself as life is too short for animosity and darkened feelings. And yes you will live forever with an attitude like that. My son he is your age and I have trained him right, to have the right attitude, do the right things in life, be your best you can and shoot for the stars, You can do it with that great attitude you carry. You will go far my friend, Never give up on hope for nothing or no one. You have it in you so use it for your advantage and yours alone, now go out there like my Rocky!!!! Love you Ms Mona x0x0x0x0
sunscreen

sunscreen

16 years 3 months ago

I try my best but there are

I try my best but there are times when it hales on my parade, though short they may be, I always make it through. And as to your son, I'm sure with a mother like you hes a very charming, and respectful fellow. Haha he probably gets all the ladies. ;) As for shooting for the stars, every day Ms. Mona, every day.