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you read to me Neruda at 2:00 a.m. a deepening blue

1.

My notepad is untitled.
No words come to fill in these blanks,
no writes of passage,
no shades of an almighty pen,

I reach for You
on the other side
no one is there
but a thousand different cries
that lay waste to days like heavy fog

I take refuge in echoes,
sounds of serendipity

walk the surface of stones and skies
beyond--
unknown, unbound

dreams I have dreamed in illusions
of a reluctant poetry that smells
of fresh bread baking,
a hunger yet to be written


2.

you read to me Neruda at 2:00 a.m.

You coughed and sipped
a little water, I wanted to
be that water,
to be swallowed,
whole

I wanted to hear that sound,
gurgling into your river of being
me, trembling like a flower
against a harsh wind

I wanted to break through time and
space, punch the walls of a flimsy
separation
I wanted to place my palms on
your chest, my fingers scented
with lemon slices from a summer
we
have yet to live

lay my head
against your heart,

I wanted to be carried
away on a boat we must craft from the shoals
we
leave behind

I wanted to feel you rising against
my need, I wanted to ride you into
oblivion

I wanted stars, I wanted seas,
I wanted the light of ecstasy, I wanted
to fall into your breath

you read to me Neruda at 2:00 a.m.
and the sun rose early today
delirious fresh bread





— Kailashana, Mar 05, 2010

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

Ok this is a trick comment.

Ok this is a trick comment. I understand philogynist.... (nice & thank you, all women thank you, Gaia thanks you, my mother thanks you!!!) but it must be one of those Theo words... eh? Hugs, Anna "If parents really would love their children there would no longer be any war." J. Krishnamurti
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Anna

This one a masterpiece and somehow touched me in a way no other did today. Just lovely wording and meaning this thought pattern and visionary it brings to the reader. Almost like the "OM" video. Now shall you make a utube video and recite this as a spoken word, I would love it so. Bravo Bella magics02 xoxoxox Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

Yeah!? If someone

Yeah!? If someone doesn't point out errors next time, I'm going to take my marbles and play elsewhere! Harumphf!!!!!!! ~A p.s. Thank ya'll for reading. What would a poem be without readers? Sad and lonely. Sniff. "If parents really would love their children there would no longer be any war." J. Krishnamurti
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

Good answer Judyanne.

Good answer Judyanne. ;-) ~A "If parents really would love their children there would no longer be any war." J. Krishnamurti
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

I am indeed a lucky woman

I am indeed a lucky woman (Hi Barry!) And yes, I often think that when I see & hear Yo-yo Ma, Joshua Bell, Eric Clapton & Jimi Hendrix (amoung others) all have my vote. Thanks for reading Mona (one of). "If parents really would love their children there would no longer be any war." J. Krishnamurti
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RobertKnott

16 years 3 months ago

Would I paint my stars lucky?-

or do I merely see they have done so themselves? If someone re-writes your words, their way, how could they be your poem? YOUR poetry- YOU? ok. don't leave. the illusion of dreams but reluctant poetry- the smell of bread baking- my hunger to be written
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

Robert, I want to thank you

Robert, I want to thank you for reading. You're too kind and I like your *parsed* version. Lots. ~A "If parents really would love their children there would no longer be any war." J. Krishnamurti
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

The poet in me yearns to be

The poet in me yearns to be read neruda at 2am,as the singer in me longs to sing duets .... I am going to write a poem from this one mum you have sparked something in me that laid dormant for years ... your an amazing woman poet mother love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Its 3 hours later, one and a

Its 3 hours later, one and a half of that I just spent working out the plan of my poem ... you have created a monster this time lol ... will post tonight ... bow thank you for the inspiration ((((hugs)))) Love Jayne-Chloe
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

To be able to write like

To be able to write like this would be my wish...beautiful...brilliant. Rosina xena465
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Mariposa

16 years 3 months ago

Raw need and desire

I felt the almsot desperate desire in the second part, a contrast to the more pragmatic first part...the windows were almsot getting steamed up in here! I also felt somewhat wistful, thinking of how we often want love that we can't have...is the other person in the poem sick? Great word choice and syntax. For instance, you could've said, "You read Neruda to me" or "Neruda read to me" which have completely different meanings and also sound a little boring. The way you wrote it, very luscious: "You read to me Neruda at 2:00 AM" is a feast to my ears and gives that bit of magical quality. Beautiful, as always, my friend and shining star in the sky! Jhena Mariposa
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Orphani

16 years 3 months ago

as you the dawn writer spark

as you the dawn writer spark promises of pirate pleasures so silk is passed thru the needles eye to wed the tapestries of our love to sail toward islands where our bodies lie sandy with naked spirits rum on my tounge
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RobertKnott

16 years 3 months ago

i agree

with Mariposa in your choice of presentation. Thus, your poetry must reflect you. It can do no other. It is also why I choose not to critique much. As i would not attempt to correct van Gogh. Nor Dickinson. Nor e.e.cummings. Please don't be offended by this. I said i was chased out of gatherings in the past. Why? Think of the reasons you want, and they probably apply. Here's what i learned; there is here and now, there is here and then, there is here and yet to be; i have been best of the best and the unnoticed. Yet to be, is at once scary and exciting. If- in the future, my words serve only to inspire and touch only one someone else to achieve in their way, then i have done something magnificient. love-
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RobertKnott

16 years 3 months ago

Hmmmmmmm...

:) maybe i've just been around. i just submitted a short, short story. it reads quick. would you like to read it? It's titled- Odd Man Out- in the short story section. R. I stopped to ask the owl- "who will I be?" The owl after a pause replied- "You are The Who, to me." I asked - "Am I who will fly?" The owl smiled, "You are who will try." -Robert Toller-