Hold On

Trying to hold on
slipping fadeing.
Crumbling like peices to a puzzle ,
dieing,crying on the inside stilll trying to hold on
darkness slowly seeps in hurting me.

I try to keep going, to stay awake,
to find a way to hold on.
Trying to find a guiding light.
It turns dark.
Slipping away now trying to stay.
Fighting the urge to slip away.
Trying to hold on,hold on to what i love.

Hold on to keep me away from the darkness.
Darkness takes over ,no way to fight it.
Slipping, no way to hold on.
Give up don't try to hold on.
Just let go.

— bella1, Mar 03, 2010

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bella1

16 years 3 months ago

my poem

i dont know how i did so thanxs for the tips

magics02

16 years 3 months ago

TITANIC

Remember in the movie Titanic when he told Rose dont ever let go, don't ever let go, and she didn't did she, She blew that whistle loud as she could till the sailor man in the small boat found her. You can hold on, focus on something positive in the darkest hour and know that you are never alone, lots of peopleae going thru the exact same situations as yourself I dont mean to sound like preacher Mom just a little lift to send your way. Hope it helps and look forward to your reads again. Smile God Loves You too!! magics02

Alice Ember

16 years 3 months ago

I agree

Your poem is great. But, I know how it feels that this is the only way to get your feelings out. Stay strong, you'll get through what ever it is. Message me if you need to talk. I'min ninth grade so, you can talk to me I'll understand. Love, Alice

ANC1996

16 years 3 months ago

(:

Hey girl heyy, Your poem rockss. & i aint jus sayinn thatt cause we cool! Lol.Your poem makes me want to run and tackle you. in a good way,, See you tommara at school. (:Love and dinosaurs, (:LYLAS, Adri