Seren

Mar 03, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

on Waratah nights

I sit in the dark, as far off
the scent of Waratah wafts
reminding me of you,

my mouth curves
a memory, as my face tilts
the moon, her red veils
run up my chest

faraway down the road
we may meet again
across a canyon of time,

our eyes will connect

I often wonder what yours
will dare tell me,
at the first dawning
will a ray of remembrance
burst through your iris

or will our words of anger
sour every glance,
turning those blue eyes
opaque

I live in wonder,
I breathe forgiveness
and only god knows
who you are anymore

but the waratah, ever blooms
of you and sickle moons
in my smiles

so hope lives
on the whispered sense of night,

and maybe only in my heart

— Seren, Mar 03, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

Beautiful. Beautiful

Beautiful. Beautiful Seren. So wistful. And of course I relate totally to the scent. Lol Judy

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks Judy I came home

Thanks Judy I came home today and the smell was incredible and well the poem memory came to life ... guess I am wistfull at the moment lol love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

Orphani

16 years 3 months ago

Exquisitely soft and radiant imagery- magnified by this stanza that enhance the olfactory, visual texture of the poem to an almost spiritual plane of thought: I sit in the dark, as far off the scent of Waratah wafts reminding me of you this stanza succinctly sets the mood and tone of the poem beautifully that then unfolds into the merging of feeling combining the Waratah with the hope of the blossoming feelings within the writer. A poem that is a pleasure to read in it's depth and sensitivity. Love what you are writing these days. B

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Barry

I appreciate your comment I am so glad you enjoyed this one ... love what YOU and ANNA have been writing its amazing stuff ... brilliant actually love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

I think scent is the

I think scent is the strongest sense, immediately taking us to a memory--the gift of recognition. Lovely lovely poem dear JayCee, everytime I smell lilacs and the stargazer lily, I know my mother is near. The scent comes from nowhere and permeates my life. The last words my mom said was *I forgive you*... took a long time to understand. Love, Mommy "If parents really would love their children there would no longer be any war." J. Krishnamurti

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

I read someone once, can’t

I read someone once, can't remember who. I think it may have been in the 'Book of Enoch.' ~The senses of sight, hearing, touch and taste are for the body. The sense of smell is for the soul~ (or something like that) lol Judy

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Book of Enoch … why is

Book of Enoch ... why is that ringing bells for me ... ??? who wrote it Judy .. somethings teasing me about that name love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

book of enoch

I don't think anyone knows who wrote it. It's supposed to be the writings of Enoch, the one who didn't die: All of the generations of Adam lived so many years, had sons and daughters, "and then ... died." "When Enoch had lived 65 years he became the father of Methuselah. And after he became the father of Methuselah, Enoch walked with God 300 years and had other sons and daughters. Altogether Enoch lived 365 years. Enoch walked with God and then he was no more because God took him away." lol Judy

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

PMSL if my dad(who is an

PMSL if my dad(who is an elder in the church) was here right now ... he'd soundly kick my ass lmao ... that was a blonde moment welcome to my world I cannot believe I didnt remember what it was it was teasing my mind driving me nuts the other night but I went to sleep and forgot to look it up thanks for the giggle lovely Love and big hugs JayCee x x x

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dearest Mum

Lilacs now theres another poem for me ... different maybe, I will have a go at a write it in the next few days ... the last words I ever spoke to my mum were in anger and ive never forgotten or forgiven myself ,never will only she can do that love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

You make me long to smell the perfume of this flower:-

Ann of Norway "my mouth curves a memory, as my face tilts the moon, her red veils run up my chest" The movements of scents as they run through the heart oh magic poetry by our Jayne of the seeing sense of smell the colours of smell the sounds of smell the spirit of smell, we can tell you have understood something beyond the ordinary and yet something also ordinary made extraordinary. I don't know the flower. I do know the poetess and love her.

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dearest Ann

You make me want to glide a waltz to your beautiful words ... the flower is beautiful I will see if I cant send some dont know what quarantine laws Norway has will check it out ... and my love reachs across oceans to you big love Jayne-Chloe x x x

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Waratah grow wild here I

Waratah grow wild here I have never planted one thanks for the comment

magics02

16 years 3 months ago

A nice ring to this one aussie lady

I like the way this one flows so evenly and ever so gently like a soft wind brushing across a face. Bravo Serene love magics02 Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks glad you enjoyed it

Silent Whisper…

16 years 3 months ago

fuck yeh ! that was awesome

fuck yeh ! that was awesome aunty jayne :P

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks BJ Glad you liked

Thanks BJ Glad you liked this one huni ... lol your always so colourful in your replies lol gotta love it Big love and hugs Aunty Jayne x x x

DawningDaytripper

16 years 3 months ago

Charming good read, and nice

Charming good read, and nice back story. All wounds can and should be healed. Forgivness and acceptance what we teach our children. Thanks for Sharing Seren, much appreciated. Julie D.D.

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Yes Forgiveness and

Yes Forgiveness and acceptence as underrated in todays society ... but sometimes I cant forgive thats my mixed heritage I guess but its something I am ever working on ... thanks for the kind comment Julie its appreciated love and hugs Jayne-Chloe

Venus x

16 years 3 months ago

I Love Your Writing

I Love Your Writing Jayne-Chloe, No matter what it is, there always seems to have a ring of the "Spirit World for me, while holding the sensual, soft side of yourself. Great pen, sweet lady. Love and Hugs, Venus xxx

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Venus

This one was one that came from nowhere sometimes I sit and the memory or the pen has a mind of its own just like with this one ... your too kind thank you for the support it is appreciated love and biggest smiles Jayne-Chloe x x x

greeneyes

16 years 3 months ago

jayne

Everything you write is magic to me. The words are beautiful, and reading your work always soothes me, no matter what. You are my hero. Love, Elizabeth P.S. Where the hell is Lyz?

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Elizabeth

Thank you so much for the support I am always glad when my friends enjoy my words ...thanks for your kind comment your always so supportive and you seem to have been here forever now always popping back to say hi ... we miss you when your gone Lyz has been busy with life shes got her grandbaby on the way in about 15wks and doing a million other things with her life ... will send your best wishes when I ring her next tried ringing her the other day noone was home love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

The sweet smell of

The sweet smell of nature...`ye canny wack it`...a Glasgow phrase for...there's nothing like it. Beautiful...congrats on the `SPOTLIGHT` Jayne. Rosina xena465

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Xena

My ex was from scotish stock so have heard 'ye canny wack it' before ... thanks for your kind comment hope your well lvoe Jayne-Chloe x x x

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

What I want things to be

will never be. What is-is. I need to acknowledge this in my heart then I am in submission and I accept.. Been wandering in here quite a while.. Exquisite it is.. Mark "I do not walk the earth and eat out of dumpsters, I'm not a bum, I'm beat."

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Mark

I think there are all things we wish for that cannot be and what is-is .... hope your stuggle and it sounds like a struggle clears itself up my friend ((((hugs))))) thanks for the kind comment on my poem it is much appreciated and its always lovely to see you love Jayne-Chloe x x x

Mariposa

16 years 3 months ago

Gorgeous

What a wonderful read, exquisite. Yes, forgiveness and letting go are a lost art indeed. Your reconciliation was beautifully penned. PS Like the new pic- you look a lot more mischievous. Jhena Mariposa

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Jhena

Thats a lovely name btw ... I am all for reviving old ways one of the being forgiveness the other letting go ... lol my pic was taken last year and it is a little more cheeky ... like Moi lol thanks for your kind comment it is appreciated love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

Millage

16 years 3 months ago

Oh Yes!

I need not say any more J.C. Utterly enchanting. Much love Millage x

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks mile man its lovely

Thanks mile man its lovely to see you around again hun ... thanks for visiting this one and the kind comment ... I got your package ~! havent listened to the CD yet but will do in a little while thank you will email you in the morning its late here love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

Atticus

16 years 3 months ago

beautiful. truly. Nathaniel

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Nathaniel

Bow thank YOU for your kind comment love Jayne-Chloe

Bernard Shaw

16 years 3 months ago

bernard shaw A soothing

bernard shaw A soothing serene poem, the flow is very good, I like it Bern

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Bern

Welcome to Neopoet i dont think we have met before? ... thank you for your lovely comment I am so glad you liked this one love Jayne-Chloe

Bernard Shaw

16 years 3 months ago

Jane Chloe

bernard shaw Hello Jane, I am slowly working my way through some excellent poems by some very skilled writers. I was given a bunch of Fresias(Spelling) the other day they smell so wonderful and your lovely poem reminded me of them. I have Family in Aussie-Land and my brother alas now deceased grew many Aussie flowers in his huge garden. I am sure he once mentioned the Waratah in one of his many letters. Keep your magic pen working you have a gift my dear. Bern.

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Bern

You carry a famous monikier ... Pygmalion is one of my favourite plays .... there are many great writters here at Neopoet in 8 days it will be a year here for me the time has flown I ahve made many friends and some new family ... some names I would suggest to read are Kailshana Ink Dragon Professor Calliope Kalgantisaros Candlewitch Cloudthings Craig infinite-dwarf weirdelf Seahbac Diatom Shells Bjp Anastas ia Lyz Poewriter Lonnie mark Patricia I could go on all night lol you get the idea but if your ever looking for someone to read i can point the way to some spectacular writes ... lovely to meet you and you can be Shaw ;)I wont forget you lol are you Irish as well? lol I wondered with a name like that Love and hugs Jayne-Chloe

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Theo

reflection ... I wrote this one for everyone that has these thoughts and feelings, and the Waratah in Bloom nothing smells quite like it its beautiful hope your holding up Take care Love Jayne-Chloe

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

http://gs174.photobucket.com/

http://gs174.photobucket.com/groups/w103/K4IT94LL8M/?action=tags&current=Waratah My lord, red & white! "A poem is never finished, only abandoned." ~ Paul Valery

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

To answer that question I

To answer that question I only have to glance ... I have a bottle of perfume and part of it contains the essense of Waratah :) only made locally Love Jayne-Chloe P.S forgot to mention I have seen Waratah Flowers that big that a man needs two hands to hold the whole bloom ... they really are magnificent

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Mum will send some perfume

Mum will send some perfume see if you like it ... I wear it all the time and I am told I smell edible lol hahaha ;) love and hugs Jayne-Chloe

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

We’ll have to ask the B

We'll have to ask the B man that. I think exotic suits me though my kids call me weird. lol. Love & hugs Mum "A poem is never finished, only abandoned." ~ Paul Valery

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

I love anything exotic … I

I love anything exotic ... I was always the perfume queen its my passion ,,, nothing better than smelling goooood lol my mum always wore perfume and so did her mum ... must be the french in me I have so many perfumes its probably a sin in some countries lol pmsl my kids hate my frankness in front of their friends ... I am too blunt sometimes but with this generation you have to shock them to get their attention lol love and hugs Jayne