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Sheep (a rant)

Too afraid
to touch the crush of stars
all real life burns fierce within,
too fearful
of the looking glass of self
that mars
the perfect slink of self-importance
oozed out delusional
in simplicity of ego,
yet far from any
reach of real reality
striking sparks from
living life to send up
blaze of bonfire thought
into a stratospheric generation
of future's holy flame.

Too fraught
with vanity of righteous center
to understand the flow of truth,
too sickened by
slow centuries of liquid
superstition seeping
ever outward into
layered rot of indignation
served delicious as
a honeyed bolus
slipped sweetly foul
between eager lips
of incredulous stupidity
in place of rising
understanding
replacing rejection
to be ever understood
as true timeline of
open honest love
instead of fear.

Too lazy
to reach up high enough to overcome
rape of reason by unforgiving jealousy,
too dumb
too fucking dumb
to have the meagerest iota
of self-determination
or know
real choice of love and life
without the stench of terror
wafting from the corpse
of knowledge knifed
slow and sure by
paternalistic hatred
of all real freedom,
clothed in vomit dogma
burning reason in
a choking fume
of scalding acid lies
screamed as truth.

Sheep deserve
the flock,
before a slow sheer and glacial slaughter
in the name of God.







— Race_9togo, Mar 02, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Earth Vicinity (within a five light-year radius), ZZC

Favorite Poets: John Donne, T.S. Eliot, Serendipity, Emily Dickenson, Kailashana, Charles Bukowski, Kabir, Rett, Dalton, W. B. Yeats, William Blake, Rainer Maria Rilke, and many other Neopoet poets; Neopoet has heavily influenced my poetry and my ability to write it well.

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Critiques

Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

Yes, it is a good rant, a

Yes, it is a good rant, a well-seasoned rant. A delicious rant. A Smörgåsbord of a rant. A slow, measured bow. Thank you. ~A "If parents really would love their children there would no longer be any war." J. Krishnamurti
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks Anna

"Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Jim

It is Jim right lol ;) ... this is fucking brilliant ... one of your best ... A slow measured BOW from me as well... bravo only have one suggestion lol second last line "before slow" I think would sound better 'before a slow' and so on just that extra 'a' would give it more oommph imo love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks Jayne

Yeah, you right, I added it. This fool pissed me off in the Dunkin Doughnut's the other day; he kept asking if I knew Jesus, and if I had been saved, etc. etc. et - fucking cetera. The line was pretty long, so I had to suffer his nauseating claptrap for a considerable amount of time. I asked him to leave me alone a couple of times, but I think he might have been either mentally ill, or perhaps under the influence of some drug or another, because he kept right on at it, with me and with others in the line. In my youth, I would have stomped the shit out of him, and then waited patiently for the police to arrive and arrest me. Nowadays, I write poetry about these things instead. Glad that you enjoyed my effort, Jayne. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

It is interesting isn’t

It is interesting isn't it.... how how we gain or lose patience and understanding when we *grow up*. Suffice it to say, I've always felt those who need to preach incessantly are quite unsure of their own *salvation* (if not mentally ill, etc.). Otherwise you sense need and then respond, that's always on a subtle level where the heart is open. ~A "If parents really would love their children there would no longer be any war." J. Krishnamurti
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 3 months ago

Anna

How true. The older we get the more intransigent we tend to become. And it is also a truism, that one's faith tends to be indirectly proportional to the amount of proselytizing one does. I find that actions speak louder than attempts to convert; kindness, generosity, empathy and compassion given and shown to those in need are what bring people to question the ideas of faith that others have, and in the end bring them to that faith, whatever form it may take. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
L

Lunegirl

16 years 3 months ago

Wowdunkin doughnuts had a

Wow dunkin doughnuts had a nut that day, i had a small chuckle at the thought of dunking doughnuts being the location of this happening to inspire this piece. My mother had an experience like this at the bus stop quite a few mornings in a row on her way to work. she shocked me and made me laugh when she told me she told him to f*$" off in the end. Great poem vix Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 3 months ago

LOL Hi Vix

Gotta tell you, it happens quite a lot in this part of the world. We have a large fundamentalist church called The First Baptist Church of Hammond, and more than a few marginally competent folk come away from the church consumed by the desire to convert the heathen. They come calling at the house every year too, usually right after the Jehovah's witnesses, but both parties always stop right away when you tell them "no". I don't tell the crazies to eff off anymore; I just say "Get thee behind me Satan", turn my back, and that usually does the trick. Didn't this time, is all. Glad that you enjoyed my effort. Respectfully Jim. "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 3 months ago

Jim...

I bet you knew I'd like this sheepled rant well, I loved it, sometimes we just got to get it out.
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 3 months ago

Hey Richard

LOL I thought you'd enjoy this one, yeah, we gotta let the poison out occasionally, it helps. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race