Rage

That is a great poem. Your really talented good job. Keep going:) Love, Alice

Ann of Norway I see the devil in your eyes, It never fails to bring me surprise,.........................cut out me? That the one who claims he loves me well, Can bring me such a living Hell. Your hateful words bring me pain................cut out the me?, They attack my soul,make me insane, Like daggers in my heart, I bleed away, One day you will be sorry, soon you will pay......you'll in both 'you will's'? You will eat your words, I promise you this,.........you'll? As I pray to my master,to deliver his kiss, He wears a black hood,he haunts your dreams, Let me tell you he is as real as he seems..........comma after you, ?Then he's Laugh if you want, it will be your last, He will fulfil my revenge, and will do it fast.....why don't I like the he will & prefer he'll as will isn't important? His kiss is not sweet, it will bring you death,.....I think the wills get too much importance here- it'll bring you death? Soon you will suck in, your very last breath. I will call him off, for a very good price,..............I'll? My Dear, all you have to do is be nice. And give me the love, from you that I yearn, Then I promise you that you wont be in a urn!....won't! You make me smile greatly at the end here, he 'won't be in an urn,' yowks he must have offended you very much then, and I am angry with him, as he doesn't need to offend such a sweet person, who tells us magic tales of goblins and fairies weaving spiders webs of words that decorate with their shapes and patterns. I've said my piece take it or leave it dear greeeneyes, but the nr. of will's( he gest a will or two then!!) is a bit too many don't you think? My love to you from me Ann.

who pissed you off lol great rhyme hun I like a few of ann's ideas good solid advice ~! love and hugs Jayne x x x

when one is hurt the heart opens up and in bursts emotions erupt one also does blast off but gets over with the worst good poem nice lovely too LOVED

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I also like Ann's advice, it will round off a great story. I almost feel sorry for someone who would tick you off, almost. You tell 'em girl! Always, Cat