Shadow Woman (oh no, not rhyming!)

Why do I keep hearing *Witchy Woman* in the background (remember that Seinfeld episode?) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MDaUybw4tCI&feature=related Smiles, Anna "If parents really would love their children there would no longer be any war." J. Krishnamurti

How many women in the world feel like this, many don't admit it, make the most of what they've got, or they can't get out of it, even if they try, a sad fact of life. You invoked plenty of feeling in me. As always a good poem that makes us think! Love Mand.

Rhyme (shudder)! I have just posted a rhyming poem too, and can imagine how ambivalent you must feel about this one. You have done a good job here, no worries. For one, the rhymes do not sound forced (my own greatest fear when rhyming). For another, the story you tell is easily accessible and universal in theme. A few spots where I thought this might still be polished (why is it that one can see it so clearly in other people's work, yet fail to see it in one's own? I fail spectacularly when I rhyme myself.): l.3: By (those) she cares (the most) about l.5/6: She lives in (eternal) shade in () memories of her past l.9: A shadow () woman longing l.12: She is more than () she seems l.16: And make () good times last l.20: /totally at a loss how to rewrite this, the other three lines in this stanza are so strong, only this last line seemed jarred and a little clumsy/ Hope you can work from there, dear poetess. Yours, ~Nina

Thought provoking and true of many women's lives. well done Cat Love judy

Beautifully...just like you Cat...A true jewel. Rosina xena465

Lovely rhymeing cat, I agree with Nina about it not sounding forced. It struck a cord with me to in many ways well done love vix Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes

hi cat good to see a rhyme i like the theme reads well its this line that is not clear to me " or a dying of the light she will ever see " why do you say a dying of the light , i am sure its what you want i am just not seeing it this evening great one this cheers zigs ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

Freestyling or rhyme you never sound forced ... wonderful read and so good to see you back round more often you were missed here love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

extra star cat , oops i frogot ,,,,,,ziggy

I love this write I wouldnt change a thing it is very good write of yours, Hope this finds you feeling a little bit better Love mona xoxooxoxo Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.

Very nice, sad pen, Cat. So many of us have been in that place :-( There is one lady I know, that your poem sounds like you wrote it for her, sad we have to be in that state at all, but even sadder we choose to stay there. Love the rhyme and flow, great read. Hugs, Venus xxx