HOLD IT???

It's hard and your true friends and will be till Just some bits of grammar, Sutton, for you to consider. Other than that most all have learned, I think, in hard ways in regards to some things. I enjoy reading your writing on life and can relate. Regards, Mark "I do not walk the earth and eat out of dumpsters, I'm not a bum, I'm beat."

Quite fitting for this day for sure. I really like it. Magics02 "Determination Brings Success"

I like the rawness of it Judy

See you picked up on Serens advise about the shouting...poem reads much better this way. I will take a few minutes to go through the changes that i think would really help bring this good write to a great write ( my opinion remember) IF I could make it my way I’d start today No more making( finding ) reason (For) the thoughts they say not needed(that) So if you look down on them And they look the same Take my advice and run Before they drive you insane… before they drive you insane I am insane Iv’e always stood up And preach(ed) what i believe in Getting drunk every night Just to jump off the deep end The fast lane was mine ( I’d let) no one else hold it But got up and sold it… got up and sold it And now i don’t hold it So before you let them get (to )you The way they got( to) me Learn from my mistakes And the scars on me Sometimes it hard to tell Who (is) your true friend singuliar reads better(s) Just know that I(,) was one And will (be) till the end…. the love i send Will never end I hope this is useful to you .The brackets make it easy to see what I feel might do with changing. It's good to edit and try and improve as you go . I like the poem by the way and as you can see your style of poetry stikes a chord with many of us here on Neo. Best Wishes Seabhac

Good song lyrics that I can relate to. Always, Cat

Yes this would make a great song Sutton. Rosina xena465