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Pre-dawn

Pre dawn, part two 
 

Lay lo la rose before dawn

As she always tended to do

Crossing the longhouse lawn

prints in the wet morning dew

 

She went through the woods

And up the small creek

Identifying some local foods

to dig up later next week

 

Salmon berries, licorice root

Wonderful in hot spice tea

Mushrooms n’ fresh fern shoots

Natures gifts grown free

 

She followed a trail to the pond

To the head of a dead end clearing

She didn’t plan to take long

Just get rid of the nights smearing

 

Red clay on her round cheeks

A hint of wild berry dye

a husband she has come to meet

She intended to catch his eye

 

He had been at the celebration

Nervous looks all around

But thanks to old maid collaboration

old traditions are newly found

 

They would have a formal meet

His grandfather had a vision

I am left to wait for his greet

Till he fulfills his elders mission

 

Seliq-wa-till was the chiefs name

With eyes of liquid brown

Tall n’ dark n’ barely tame

His voice was a rumbling sound

 

She had dreamt of their sons

Several years in the past

Knowing he would be the one

Makes an impression that tends to last

 

Lay lo la was unaware of the quest

That prolonged their introduction

in the mean time as the clans guest

On hold her knowing seduction

 

But she had her silent moment

And headed back to the lodge

No one person who owned it

It belonged to the tribe, not odd

 

Twenty five by eighty was the longhouse

of log, mud and woven thatch work

Sparse, clean, not even a mouse

Not a place some shadow could lurk

 

She pulled back the fur curtain

To the aroma of wood and smoke

A dog raised his head, uncertain

Half a grumble in the back of his throat

 

She dug in her cloak for a treat

She knew how to make friend

With just a tid bit of dried meat

Those growls were quick to end



 

Julie

D.D.

2/26/2010 first poem on my new computer.

— DawningDaytripper, Feb 28, 2010

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Region, Country: Robe valley, WA, USA

Favorite Poets: All of them, for differant reasons. Neopoet poets have influenced me the most over the last 2 plus years. Great teachers. Edgar Allen Poe, Dickens, way to many to list...

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Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

Perfumes of the fruits and clay earthiness

Ann of Norway "Seliq-wa-till was the chiefs name With eyes of liquid brown Tall n’ dark n’ barely tame His voice was a rumbling sound" Oh just listen to that ! And smell the perfumes of the fruits and clay earthiness, the dew wet on your bare feet, the soft warmth of the fur brushing your hand, and the permeating sweet smoke filling all our senses. I enjoyed this Julie and will come back to experience the atmosphere again and again. Dreamed into other worlds. Love Ann.
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you sweet Ann, I have

Thank you sweet Ann, I have been trying to describ with out going in to distracting, more story. To keep it moving. I don't have the freedoms starting this as a ryhme. This will be many differant forms I think in several years. I have had this theme and been saving it for a long time. And truthfully it has always been in ryhme. I think I thought I lacked the skill to see it through. And who knows, but we only live once. It just started to flow the other night and I would never shush a muse. And everytime I get stuck with it, I go away come back and it flows again. So roughs are rough, but the final cut is almost making it. Then I am absorbing the feedback from everyone, but been so busy I have not had a chance to respond. I have the third part and will be posting tonight. Would love to know what you think. Julie D.D.
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 3 months ago

Your comment it stars in my

Your comment it stars in my eyes Kal, thanks for the advice, I will try my best to keep that in mind. It may be a while before I finalize this, but I will come back and spiff it up. Any specifics you would like to see improved? Thanks for your read. Julie D.D.
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Great hob part 2 dd

Just lovely gal and how are you doing? I really liking it there gal. I think I shall try one of these part series poems, may be interesting, got to get with my Indi to head me up with it. He is my moderator you know, JK Indi love ya xoxoxomagics02 Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.