broken_skye

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Love, Pain, and Memories.

Love is only pain,

Pain is only memories

Memories are forgotten.

Hidden down inside.

Never to come out.

Our hearts remember.

The pain and sorrow.

Our minds forget.

Locked inside the nothingness.

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jetz

16 years 2 months ago

I don’t mean to be

I don't mean to be cruel. I really am not comfortable in critiquing anyones writes. Skye... "Memories are forgotten"..?? One does not forget memories. That's why they are memories .. I get what you are trying to say. You need to re-work this... I look foward to the rewrite.

broken_skye

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks but no thanks

I will not change my poem because you don't understand. Indi is right and memories are forgotten if you push them down so far that you forget.

Mark

16 years 2 months ago

Memories

Well, skye, memories are felt out until the feelings fade then they go in storage until it is a need that we recall but the feeling once attached to them is ususally almost gone or in fact gone. This process of memories is normal, Skye. With deep respect, Mark "I do not walk the earth and eat out of dumpsters, I'm not a bum, I'm beat." P.S Is this poem about alziemers or depression or both? Like indi says in a way some poetry can be a bit unclear (some very).

hillrider

16 years 2 months ago

I should probably

Butt out, but won't - not yet. The poem is about being hurt, deeply by someone you care about and burying that pain so deep it CAN'T TOUCH YOU because if it did the memory would prevent you from ever trying to feel love again for anyone or anything. We may never TRULY forget but as in repressed memories some deal with how they have been hurt in a way that works for them so they can continue to function. Or at least that's what I get from this Skye can always correct me. Indi

Mark

16 years 2 months ago

Duly noted

And appreciated, a sad poem indeed. I shall return.. Mark "I do not walk the earth and eat out of dumpsters, I'm not a bum, I'm beat."

broken_skye

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks for another comment!!

Thanks and you are right.

broken_skye

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks for the comment

Thanks for the comment but Indi is right about this one again.....

Darknlovely3436

16 years 2 months ago

yes memories can

It can alzheimer's diseases cause memories loss

broken_skye

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks Dark!

That is so true and very sad.

hillrider

16 years 2 months ago

And she scores!

This is great Skye or as the stars indicate - Awesome! Not a lot of extra sentimentality to get the point across. I got what you meant and personally don't think it needs changing, but you do as you think. I "forget" the memories/pain a lot, it is what allows me to continue believing in and experiencing love otherwise it wouldn't be worth trying again. This poem is dead on with me. Indi

broken_skye

16 years 2 months ago

Thanls Indi!

Thank you so much for the comment and finally someone whom understands what I am tring to say! Wow that is a relief.

arja

16 years 2 months ago

LOL! good point

LOL! good point Darknlovely.. Jetz, i think Skye was trying to convey that it is the memory of the pain that is forgotten (if one truly decides to)..the problem is, it is not that easy to forget a pain inflicted to you, specially from someone we loved. "The mind may forget (due to Alzheimer's!), but the heart will always remember." ..overall, love this piece Skye..i love reading it over and over, (for me) no need to re-write (but still your choice)..

broken_skye

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks Alone

I see that you like my work. But one question......What is so funny??

arja

16 years 2 months ago

…its not the poem, Jetz

...its not the poem, Jetz was asking how a memory would be forgotten (i was thinking of an explanation for the possibility of that), when I read Darknlovely's clever answer.. :) so i just put the two together.. although I'm not laughing at the desease..

jetz

16 years 2 months ago

I never left a comment with

I never left a comment with the intent of upsetting you. Indi has his opinion, I have mine...Because he is of the same opinion as you....he's right? I'm wrong? Skye...I get the poem...I just feel the words, as they stand now....are confusing...ambiguous. A few changes could clear it all up, for all of us that are poetically challenged. Just my opinion...if you don't agree.... no problem. Peace. Sue

hillrider

16 years 2 months ago

Sue, please realize that we can disagree

And both be right or both wrong. It's poetry. Clearly defined ideas are better left for science. One way to get your point across is to politely ask the author to explain their intent rather than to suggest change to suit what you personally feel is the correct stance. One last note, some poems are written to be INTENTIONALLY ambiguous in an attempt to provoke or induce thought, look around this site alone and you will find numerous examples,if you have difficulty locating any let me know ans I will be glad to send you in the right direction. Indi

Mark

16 years 2 months ago

as I said ..

Mark "I do not walk the earth and eat out of dumpsters, I'm not a bum, I'm beat."

Silent_Rain

16 years 2 months ago

...

Its a pretty poem Skye, Plz tell me whats on your mind when I see you this weekend... ok, I love you Baby Sister! ~Rain~

broken_skye

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks Rain

Thanks Rain I love the comemnt see ya this weekebd! ;)

arja

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Skye, I read this poem

Dear Skye, I read this poem again..(skipping others comments)..it reminds me of a movie, "The Notebook" can't remember the actors! ..but i do hope you've watched it. it's a love story! ..like your poem, it is emotionally sad and in reality true...

Dark.Poetress

16 years 2 months ago

great poem skye,it is very emotionally conected to depression

hey skye I definatly understand your poem,and also memories can be forgotten,if there unpleasent or u dont want to remember them they usually get pushed so far back in your mind that u forget them all together.well its a wonderful poem ans I hope I will have time to read even more of your work. ,Poet_Laurete

Mark

16 years 1 month ago

The last line

To cage anything especially an emotion is a bad thing. But to look and see is a beginning of setting it free. What else is there to do but blow up with the anger or implode ignoring it. Truly, Mark Resilient Flexibility