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judyanne
judyanne
Feb 28, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Heartbeat

The winds of change sighed gently

and blew my world apart.

My existence transmuted in the time I spent

between two beats of my heart.

For a moment I thought it had stopped

it seemed to twist and flip.

As if an insidious invisible fist

had ex-sanguinated it.

 

And then I wished that it had.

Such pain too great to bear.

But my perfidious heart kept beating on

as if afraid to stop.

Stop.

Heart beat beaten heart

beating heart don’t beat heart beat.

 

Broken heart kept beating.

 

— judyanne, Feb 28, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

Thump. Lump in throat

Thump. Lump in throat swallowed like a poem. ~A "If parents really would love their children there would no longer be any war." J. Krishnamurti
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

what a most beautiful thought, giving the heart the wings

Ann of Norway First thought what a most beautiful thought, giving the heart the wing-beats of a butterfly in your wording, its beautiful red denoting the whole sense of the pathos of your feelings so strongly expressed here. Some thoughts about the poem:- "My existence transmuted in the time I spent............muted in time ( no I spent or the!) between two beats of my heart. For a moment I thought that it had stopped"...........no that? The idea in the following I find totally wonderful but feel the positioning of the words doesn't quite do justice to the music of the poem. I don't know just now the answer but think it could be .... well you know what I mean I hope? Do you need to space it so far away from the rest of the text? Just me!! This can be a really particular poem Judyanne. With my love to you, Ana-Nya. "Heart beat beaten heart beating heart don’t beat heart beat.   Broken heart kept beating."
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

You’re right of couse

You're right of couse Ana-Nya - I'll take the 'that' out immediately. Thanks. Not sure about the 'the'. Maybe someone else will give me an opinion too. I feel it is a specific moment - the time. Also removed one of the line spaces. Do you think it reads better now? lol Love and hugs Judy
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Judy

what can I say give my heart wings anytime girl ... good to be back reading everyone ... tried to get to this one today and was detoured lol but I made it Love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Only back for the night and

Only back for the night and then go back in a few hours, needed some family time and Neofamily time lol love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe you guys always make me feel betterer lol
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

hello

I don't know how it read before, but it reads just fine. This one I can really relate to. I like your style. Always, Cat