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evie.haywood
Feb 27, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

What I Was

That is what I was:Blind and selfish.At an utter lost,Not a single wish. My head would ache And my back would crack.My bones would break And my bags would pack. I held love and loathingEach and every day,For myself and for othersSo run, I would away. Dragged down by fears,But lifted with hope.Drowned by tears,But saved by cope. I loved my family, but didn't see the pain.I hated myself, but wanted to play the game.
— evie.haywood, Feb 27, 2010

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xena465

16 years 3 months ago

This is nice and

This is nice and personal. You should start a buddy list...to help you to get started on a buddy list, click on my name on this comment; it will take you to my profile. On the left-hand side you will see Add to buddy list` click on that and then click `add`. Once you've done this you can do the same with other people, like the members comment on your poems, and do the same thing. Also you can send private messages that only the member you're sending it to will be able to read. You'll find this at the bottom of the Navigation bar on the right of the page. Rosina xena465
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evie.haywood

16 years 3 months ago

Thank You again. It was

Thank You again. It was written in quite a short amount of time, do you have any ideas on how I could improve? Evie
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

No it’s fine as it is

No it's fine as it is evie...have another read yourself and see if you wish to add anything. I find with my poems I sometimes read them over and decide I haven't express enough of how I feel and just add a bit more. It' a nice piece. And if you're happy then I'd leave it. Rosina xena465