TENDRIL TRACE

darkness
lit your outline
as if blind
I feel only you

its the silence
thats captivating
the anger ebbs

action speak

tell you your beautiful
that broken hearts
fill

that light enters
tracer flights

you are
more

more than this

— Esker, Feb 27, 2010

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Esker

16 years 3 months ago

Thank You Darknlovely3436

I am going to have to return to complete this Thank you for thoughts and feelings Esker

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

This is beautiful

Lovely poem and a warm welcome to Neopoet. I little typo on the last line more then( than) this I really look forward to reading more of your work you have great emotion in your work. Seabhac

Esker

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you for the help

I found "you are" to "you're" Line eight during this revision Esker

Esker

16 years 3 months ago

re write

"darkness comsumes igniting only outlines glowing like shard tipped aura ebb captivation speak anger action tracer feel you are beautiful in broken hearted fill where wound winds sing..........."

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Esker

first off welcome to Neopoet I think you maybe new, secondly I am pushed for time right now but will be sure to visit this one on my return wonderful write kind regards Jayne-Chloe