Competition-Japanese 'style'

Japanese
- Any documented Japanese style
- Subject = Rain
- Must provide link defining style
- ___________
- Not keeping to haiku, they are freestyle haiku-style poems.
- _____________________
- Grey sheets
- shaking visions
- rain
- Grey sheets shaking my (5)
- visions, the world, my window (7)
- now painted with rain (5)
- _________________________________
- Rain falling
- leaves falling
- all falling
- rain is falling down
- all about our town in grey can't
- go another way
- _________________________________
- water from the water butt
- overflowing on the garden
- ever rain
- from the water butt
- wizened flowers in the sun
- thank the rain again
- ___________________________________
- Never stopping always
- clouds pencil their stripes
- in rain
- Pencilled stripes from clouds
- nature's theatre gently falls
- with rain.
- Stripes of grey make shreds
- of water from out the sky
- rain clouds depress me
- My private shower
- birch tree in the winds of Spring
- seeds of thought for dreams
- Shaken trees in the night
- folding the chairs in a pile
- cushioned with the rain
- ____________________
- black wet logs, the wood
- now logged with pools of silver
- natures's mirrors smoothe
- _______________
- In spring the trees
- see their own reflections now
- do they ever think

— Nordic cloud, Feb 27, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Oslo and Flatdal, Norway., NOR

Favorite Poets: Too daunting this.

Critiques

Mariposa

16 years 3 months ago

Interesting experimentation

It's neat that you were, as you say, having fun with the theme- so often we forget that's part of the reason we write poetry, for Enjoyment.

raskin

16 years 3 months ago

I like the theme that you

I like the theme that you used throughout. I enjoy writing the haiku and tanka, probably tanka more. I like what you did here. Fun. raskin

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

Lovely imagery Ana-NyaLove

Lovely imagery Ana-Nya Love to you judyanne

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

Oh don't bother about the blooming stars

Ann of Norway This is a sort of challenge couldn't we all here, do some variations on the theme and produce the best one out of many, it should perhaps have been put elsewhere like General poetry, and used as an exercise for us all, I haven't put something that needs judging, just a series of thoughts on which YOU can embellish, change, or make you own complete new 'poem' Okay? Love from me and thank you for the comments quand même! Ann Ana Nya and all!!

Cloudthings

16 years 3 months ago

as I read I found idylls of absolute perfect beauty, that transp

Wonderful Annushka, as I read I found idylls of absolute perfect beauty, that transported me to places I feel completely at peace in or love deeply, your themes were all divine, though I admit I would rather have seen the explanation at the bottom or in a blog, it scrambled me a little, I got the gist as I read & loved your concept of exploring these styles. You are a great pioneer my friend. Cheers Anni~ "Three passions have governed my life: The longings for love, the search for knowledge, And unbearable pity for the suffering of [humankind]." Bertrand Russell

Cloudthings

16 years 3 months ago

Each of these on their own would pull a myriad of stars to you m

Just read your above comment - love you even more dear one! This must be my favourite, though so many leapt inside my heart. # My private shower # birch tree in the winds of Spring # seeds of thought for dreams_______ # & these I loved... # black wet logs, the wood # now logged with pools of silver # natures’s mirrors smoothe # # _______________ # # In spring the trees # see their own reflections now # do they ever think # Pencilled stripes from clouds # nature’s theatre gently falls # with rain. Each of these on their own would pull a myriad of stars to you my dearest poet, how I adore you being! xxx Cheers Anni~ "Three passions have governed my life: The longings for love, the search for knowledge, And unbearable pity for the suffering of [humankind]." Bertrand Russell

magics02

16 years 3 months ago

I tried it ?? or did I not??? :)

Wet day so rainy from streaming water we hide time to get inside weather on my mind rainshower my very sweet kind rise, the flowers bloom rain rain go away we have much to do this day soon the rose shall bloom Ann is this it?? Let me know and I thank you love magics02 x0x0x0x

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

Oh beautiful little poems my magic Mona

Ann of Norway I had to clock in immediately I saw your poems and love them, this short style suits you you must do more, I shall have time later to say more about them, love for now Anna.