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pleiades
Feb 26, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

fragile

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the pale dawn casts me in pastels
and I find I like the fragility
of the delicate hues

I like the way my skin looks-

   muted

       lucent

a studied contrast
against vibrant hands
that trace my contours

one electric finger at a time

across my brow
my lips,
my shimmering emotions

I like the smell of my skin
after the press of yours

I like how it holds your scent

and how,
hours after loving,
your whispered words
echo still.


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— pleiades, Feb 26, 2010

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Cloudthings

Cloudthings

16 years 3 months ago

Delicious sensual write, I know these sensations & love how you

Delicious sensual write, I know these sensations & love how you have painted them in words, captured so clearly, so dreamily, so lasciviously. Every now & then your name comes to my inbox, but I have so little time for computer life (my other life has weighty pull for some time)... I am so glad to have made the time to search you out... I feel like you write my heart, every time I read you, only so muc more eloquently... sorry if it sound self centred, it's just true. You write beautifully even if I didn't feel that way, the skill & beauty of your poems stands. Hope all is good, a pleasure to find you. Cheers Anni~ "Three passions have governed my life: The longings for love, the search for knowledge, And unbearable pity for the suffering of [humankind]." Bertrand Russell
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pleiades

16 years 3 months ago

ahh anni…always such a

ahh anni...always such a fuzzy feeling when i see your name. the no time thingy?...i know exctly what you mean. i find myself just popping in and quickly out of neo, as life is so busy lately. i always visit 2 pages when i come here...yours and orgami's...i just never have the time to write a decent review! when things settle down, i'll be much more able to languish in your poetry. your words here are so kind anni...i just lap up your praise! hope all is well and happy with you in your beautiful neck of the woods...i haven't been to daylesford for over a year...i'm waaaaay overdue for my week-end away...the convent gallery is one of my most favourite places to wander through...i could spend the entire day there...*sigh
Esker

Esker

16 years 3 months ago

sensous

soothing words in this world of action I find your poetry very entrancing and calming Like gallery walks and bookstore shops
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pleiades

16 years 3 months ago

“Like gallery walks and

"Like gallery walks and bookstore shops" 2 of my favourite things...particularly bookstores. i love what you say here...thank you
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear P

Bravo you've hit your stride with this one loved it ... nothing to critique love Jayne-Chloe
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pleiades

16 years 3 months ago

thank you jc for your

thank you jc for your positive words. this is an oldie...the creative juices have dried up at the moment! [maybe i need to wet my whistle? it's gotta be happy hour somewhere in the world]
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Just loved this one

Can not say anything other then I really like this one from you. Really good there keep it coming. lOve magics02 xoxoxo Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
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pleiades

16 years 3 months ago

if all you can say is that

if all you can say is that you really like this, then i'm more than happy. them's fine words to hear! many thanks, p.
Esker

Esker

16 years 2 months ago

Re read

I love how a different day mood and weather can change the tone and feel of a poem in ones thoughts on ones tongue forming words many read these aloud a fine poem Esker fave line is "I like the smell of my skin after the press of yours"
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pleiades

16 years 1 month ago

“I like the smell of my

“I like the smell of my skin after the press of yours” my favourite lines too i like to hug the smell to myself...keep it for as long as i can ...pull the neck of my jumper over my nose, have just my eyed peeping out...and inhale thanks for stopping by again yes, often a re-read can bring about a different feel p.