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The Ghost Train

I didn’t want to let him go.

After all, he was only five.

“Come on mum,” says Senior Seven,

“I’ll guard him with my life.”

I studied them, standing tall and straight.

They looked so big and grown.

I felt a strong nostalgic wave.

Where had my little ones gone?

 

I stretched across to get a hug

as they entered through the gate.

But they both squirmed neatly out of reach.

Sissy cuddles?  No thanks mate.

Again the thought ‘where have they gone?’

My babies of last year?

Sunrises and sets have insidiously

been stealing them from me.

 

So on the ghost train they did ride.

All by themselves they went.

And the scream began the moment

they disappeared into the tent.

It was a shriek, it didn’t stop.

And the journey was long and slow.

The long loud wail of Master Five,

echoed throughout the Show.

 

I heard the howl – high-pitched and scared.

(And that ride it was so slow.)

And when Master Five stepped off the train

his face was as white as snow.

His eyes were wide and huge in his head.

His skin was almost transparent.

The jaunt had been no joy for him.

I felt the worst of parents.

 

I watched them as they ran to me

no longer so grown and big.

I spread my arms out open wide

then held tight both my kids.

And Senior Seven stood brave and strong.

(‘Tho his legs shook to the utmost.)

“That’s the last time I ride with him.

He scared me more than the ghost!”

 

— judyanne, Feb 26, 2010

About This Poem

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Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

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judyanne

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks Eph.Judy now goes to

Thanks Eph. Judy now goes to the fair and listens to the sound of screams of terror on the scary rides, safe on the horse on the merry-go-round. Thanks for the support Love Judy PS sorry, the perfectionist in me had to change that last line.
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Brilliant images and the

Brilliant images and the love for your kids shines through...touched my heart so tenderly...I loved it. It's weird, as I was looking through my old poems today to choose one, one of them is called `The Ghost Train`, but it's about a man on a train with everyone ignoring him and it was only at the end of the poem that he realised that he was on a different journey...he was a ghost among ghosts...but I by-passed that one as it needed too much editing. I chose a more sombre one...working hard on it now...Bah!! It's hard work this one too!!! Rosina xena465
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you so much Rosina.It

Thank you so much Rosina. It is wierd, I've thought of putting on a few poems here too and have discovered the same topic written by others. Shows we're all connected eh? lol Judy
jetz

jetz

16 years 3 months ago

Another fine write. You have

Another fine write. You have a wonderful way of bringing us right along with you in your story/poem. That is not always an easy task. Truly enjoyed. Sue
mand

mand

16 years 3 months ago

Brings back memories! Sounds

Brings back memories! Sounds like you had a really good time. You are diverse in your writings, shows talent. Love Mand