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ziggy
Feb 25, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

BROKEN

Let me dawdle in your slip stream
transparent escapades , leaving
behind where you have been .
Your illumination soaked up by
my hungry need of it .

Solitude , turned snow capped
mountain peaks in to a valley of
tears . a leech on a peach reaching
inward for that succulent flavor sought
after and savored .

Even stopped clocks express consistence
at some point within the passing of day
and night .

A compromise of sorts till open wounds
congeal , the broken never fail kept
canvas never set to sail.
— ziggy, Feb 25, 2010

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seabhac

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

Now this is from a deep place

The Zig man is back...... This is a poem of great vocal delight the lines a leech on a peach reaching inward for that succulent flavor sought after and savored just reading them aloud makes my mouth water The last two verses hold the gem to this poem deep and thought provoking but also readily accessabe by their language. This is a cracker Ziggy Seabhac
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ziggy

16 years 3 months ago

hi`d

good good , great to know you like it ha i`m back but for how long ,,,,cheers and thank you ......ziggy
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Ziggy

Let me dawdle in your slip stream transparent escapades , leaving behind where you have been . Your illumination soaked up by my hungry need of it . These words held me captivated from the start of your poem. They just reached out and grabbed me. Then the last two stanzas brought the piece home! I loved it. It is good to see you writing with ease again. Always, Cat
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ziggy

16 years 3 months ago

hi cat

ah your comment is sweet music to my ears lol, i knew when i finished it that it was better than some of my more recent sorry atempts , cheers cat ,,,,,,,,,,,ziggy
yenti

yenti

16 years 3 months ago

Ziggy

A lonely poem of wandering for the sake of just wandering, I will look forward to the next phase when the sun shines within your emotions and that vapor trail is long gone. Keep the memories of those past days they will fuel future poetry, but it will be a great day to see how you cope with a love that is unconditional and all yours, the starting place is to look in the mirror each day and tell that man there that you love him, then others will join the queue to your door, Yours Ian.T
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ziggy

16 years 3 months ago

hi

hi cheers for the comment , but this is not about me but what it is a theme about someone taking shelter in another persons dreams till they stand again ,,,,,,,many thanks ,,,,,,,,,,,,ziggy
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Mandyboo

16 years 2 months ago

hey

i liked your poem!great job mandyboo