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Icy Hot

simply maddening
this thumping...
this stomping
grinding thunder...
bottles and cans
promising
lack-lustre
aspirations and fancies
rich and brilliant.
this chair
this cold blueness
this hole

this back
feebling and sore
that carries pianos
to the second flight
game-rooms
without poetic metaphor.
just grunts and gasps
with every
sweat groaned step.
creases-
like back roads
and muddied ruts-
where they
oughtn't've been
layed.

face and hands
iron and steam
soap and rag
miles and miles to go
until fevered
epiphanies
in the shower.

sweat pours
like sweet water
slip-slap
slopping
my gritted stubble.
water spills
like fresh blood
drip-drop
draping
my shoes and dolly.
i keep band-aids
now.  neosporin
and peroxide, too.
at the rear
my WACs
and major
hot lips.
icy hot.
essentials.

— the_fool, Feb 24, 2010

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Region, Country: Austin, TX, USA

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yenti

yenti

16 years 3 months ago

Hi

You lost me some place in there the picture you paint is of mostly an old steam engine driver, you abreviation of WAC's is lost, but will try to find in my slang book, Will await a small explain on these before I star you for the writing. As there is so much abreviation in the States it's hard to keep up with things, I liked your write it was great, just those two things, Yours Ian.T PS:- the only abreviation I find in my old dictionary for WAC is "Womens Army Corp" then if so a lot of your poem would make a great deal of sense and I give it 4 Stars for that one.