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Another Life

                    Another Life

      For days now I've been dreaming..
            four separate days and nights
      Strange for me to dream like this
            you'd think I'd have it right
      The dream never changes
            it's been the same each time
      Starting with the glow from the fire
            to the way your lips meet mine

      Opening vision is this wall...
            A large wall that's made of stone
      located dead in the center
            a raging fire,  nearby I sit, alone
       I'm dressed in a long white gown
            and there's candles everywhere
      In my hands I hold a paper
            in my eyes, just a blank stare

      There's music playing somewhere
            'least I think that's what I hear
      There's a definite rhythm beating
            not just  me, it's everywhere
       Then this knock sounds out loudly
            startling me right to the core
      This chill runs down my body
            as you walk in through the door

      Now this part seems quite silly..
            before me you stand in frills  
      You speak to me in tongues of old
            in your hand, a writing quill
      'Neath your arm you carry a journal
            there's a sword strapped to your side
      Though I know not what you're saying
            unmistakable, the look in your eyes

      Then suddenly, this aroma...
            a cross between fruit and spice
      To me it's vaguely familiar
            exciting, both fire and ice
      You hand to me this goblet
            and you stare into my eyes
      As you encourage me to drink
            your face  wet with tears you cried

     You take my face into your hands
            your eyes see to my soul
      With our lips nearly touching
            you whisper soft and low
      But try as I may I can't hear you
            or somehow I  don't understand
      You smile at me with those green eyes
            and point to the page in my hand

      As my eyes focus upon it...
            the paper comes to life
      There within these same four walls
            stood us in another life
      Your arms were wrapped around me
            your lips were pressed to mine
      Our bodies were joined together
            but another place, in time

      As I look up from the paper..
            suddenly I feel a chill
      As I slowly look around me
            I see a bird, upon the sill
      As he flies off, a breeze is blowing
            the page is taken from my hand
      It flutters into the fire
            and there I am......alone again.

— jetz, Feb 22, 2010

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Region, Country: South eastern Connecticut, USA

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xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Wow! What a lovely piece of

Wow! What a lovely piece of writing. This is beautiful in every way, rhyme, flow, imagination...it's got it all...just brilliant. Rosina xena465
jetz

jetz

16 years 3 months ago

Rosina, Thank you for

Rosina, Thank you for taking the time to read and respond. This is a favorite piece of mine and it means a lot that you enjoyed it. By the way, it really was a reccuring dream. Sue
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

I’ve had many of

I've had many of them...one being not so nice as yours. I have one that is three little devilish dwarf-like creatures...one is biting my neck...the other two are biting my feet. I feel the pain so much that when I awake I immediately check my feet and neck for bites. This is very beautiful. Rosina xena465
jetz

jetz

16 years 3 months ago

Xena, Once again, ty. I

Xena, Once again, ty. I have written many poems that came from my dreams. I commiserate with you on the 'biting' dream..I have a "Vampyre" in many of mine. Once again, thanks Sue
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

It’s a pleasure…I love

It's a pleasure...I love your poems. I'm going to read some more in the next day or so. Rosina xena465
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Jetz

I have to tell you this is the best one on here this day. You really wowed me away with this one, so lovely it was, I pictured the poem and story and seen the page fly into the fire leaving you alone, but what a beautiful sentiment it left me. Really good here Jetz. Kudos to you gal. Magics02 "Determination Brings Success"
jetz

jetz

16 years 3 months ago

Magic,Thank you. It’s

Magic, Thank you. It's always nice when another shares your feelings for a particular poem. This one is special.. in many ways. I appreciate the read and reply. Sue
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Sue

I was taken by the whole poem which is exquisite, by the way, but these lines, are my favorites: Now this part seems quite silly.. before me you stand in frills You speak to me in tongues of old in your hand, a writing quill ‘Neath your arm you carry a journal there’s a sword strapped to your side Though I know not what you’re saying unmistakable, the look in your eyes The ending really touched me. Always, Cat
jetz

jetz

16 years 3 months ago

Awwwwwwww…Cat, that’s my

Awwwwwwww...Cat, that's my favorite stanza too. Somehow...those words flowed.. perfectly, describing that part of my dream. I only wish that "flow" was with me at all times. But..alas...life.. Thanks for reading, and responding. Sue I am not in the loop here... have you been ill?
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 3 months ago

Great work...

I was curious as to what one who thought my work was eloquent, was writing like. I am very pleased at finding out. And you thought MY work was eloquent? I would take my hat off to you, but I am afraid that my head would freeze. Lovely work! ~ Geezer
jetz

jetz

16 years 3 months ago

Hi Geezer, Thanks so much

Hi Geezer, Thanks so much for stopping by and for taking the time to read and leave a note. Glad you liked this one as well. We still have more winter to go so, yes, hang on to your hat!!!! Once again, thanks for the lovely comment. Sue
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hippiepoet69

16 years 2 months ago

the devil

didn't make me say AWESOME! this time. I say it. This poem sent chills up my spine. What a GREAT poem. Take Care. huey