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just so

I am the rain you hear 
between your heartbeats,
as the feather floating above
reeds, of time
I fly

with hands infinitesimal
I stroke the hairs
on the nape of your neck
to considerable highs

within mucus and membranes
I interweave,
sweeping specks
of lightning off my back

so, I am
still

all and nothing
a sum of wear
and the 'O' in one


— Seren, Feb 22, 2010

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Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 3 months ago

Intriguing Jayne!

I had visions of mother, lover - existential angst/relief running around in my head to no clear resolution. you always did like to keep us guessing! well done!~ boni
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks Boni … surprised

Thanks Boni ... surprised you didnt get me, cause the resolution is there ... third last line ... ;) love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x
C

CyberSpace

16 years 3 months ago

orsm poem should the comma

orsm poem should the comma be after heartbeats ?love hubby xoxoxoxoxox
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

LOL yes thank you sweety …

LOL yes thank you sweety ... I didnt notice it till just then oppps(huggles) and biggest love Wifey x x x x
B

buggles

16 years 3 months ago

very well done

I really liked the flow of this, I thank you for a pleasant read,,,oh by the way , was the bloke i remind you of a handsom bloke of a ugly fella lol, once again ty for the good read
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Buggles

The guy I spoke of was a comedian lol and very funny .... thanks for your kind remarks on this one I appreicate the read kind regards Jayne-Chloe x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

hahaha… again we think

hahaha... again we think alike, I woke up with a love poem this morning. I love you. ~M "If parents really would love their children there would no longer be any war." J. Krishnamurti
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

We gotta stop doing that eh

We gotta stop doing that eh LOL ... naaaaaaa fuck that hahahaha you have a good sleep when you get to bed ... love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 3 months ago

The "O" in One...

I got the feeling of being "one" with the universe, and all the love in it. you really have a way with making "one" think about how we relate. I love the way you sweep the specks of lightning off your back! Lotta love and higgest bugs,~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Gee

there is a one-ness of sorts thanks for the read and the comment hun ... glad you liked the lightning that line came from nowhere lol but this ones far from done just a start so to speak ... love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

‘so, I am stillall and

'so, I am still all and nothing a sum of wear' A love poem needs to be special for me to like it Seren, and I love this one. lol Judy
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Judy

Its sort of a love poem but its also about something else lol but I going to wait and see if anyone else twigs to what it is ... maybe I was too obscure but we shall see lol love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 3 months ago

EUREKA!

I think I found it - or it found me .... fleetingly, but enjoyable none the less! ;) lol Boni