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Sweet Wreckage

Old dinners litter
dining room table,
dregs of wine as red as
blood still staining goblets,
forgotten salad remnants wilted,
crumbs and crusts now stale on plates all
left behind in wake
of gentle urgent kisses,
water glasses patterned by
impatient fingertips
and taste of crimson lipstick.

Discarded clothing trails rumpled
through living room to bathroom,
black silk skirt and cotton jacket,
socks and stockings,
garter belt and panties
peeled off by teeth,
blue shirt and emerald blouse,
jeans and jockey shorts
lead to where soft rose petals
still cling pink
and glistening
to empty bath.

Soaked footprints climbing stairs;
damp towels
red and yellow halfway up
lie crumpled
left behing in haste
so hands could
eagerly caress:
rose petals have fallen
wet as rain from naked skin;
one robe carefully draped
upon the bannister,
another discarded
on upstairs floor
with more soft petals,
a terrycloth arrow
pointing to bedroom.

Within the confines of bed and sleep
scented candles are all melted,
burned away by
long length of joy,
air still tinged with odor of
burned wicks
honeysuckle
and sweet scent of
sensuous arousal
long satiated.

The room is chaos,
quilts and blankets
strewn on floor by
urgency
and body heat,
sculpted into
memories of
ecstacy
by long hours of
touch
delicious gasps
pressing lips on skin
slow easy rythym
clutching fingers and
shuddering release.

Yet the bed is quiet now
a single sheet
dewed with delight
covering sleep of satisfaction
breath and heartbeats matched
bodies still entwined
dreaming of spent passion
and passions still to come.









— Race_9togo, Feb 21, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Earth Vicinity (within a five light-year radius), ZZC

Favorite Poets: John Donne, T.S. Eliot, Serendipity, Emily Dickenson, Kailashana, Charles Bukowski, Kabir, Rett, Dalton, W. B. Yeats, William Blake, Rainer Maria Rilke, and many other Neopoet poets; Neopoet has heavily influenced my poetry and my ability to write it well.

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Critiques

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neha raju

16 years 3 months ago

nic

great poem
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you Neha

I am glad that you liked it. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks Ephraim,

I'll think about what you said. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Wow The race to go roses and all.....

Just beautiful here race, the part that kept me in was the soft rose pedals to skin wow what an imagination you have and what a romantic poet!!! Just splendid write of yours young man I say. Magics02 xxoxoox "Determination Brings Success"
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks magics

For your kind comment. Couple of things... I am not a young man, lol. My eldest, she is 21, and my sons are both teenagers now. This is not from my imagination, Magics, but rather from my memory. Long marriage demands some thoughtful (but not too well-planned) romance mixed with the familiar desires of long life together. I love her beyond the measure of all things (read some of my other poems) and keeping it romantic and passionate for her is one of my greatest joys. Try rose petals some time, ;), they work for me. I am glad that you enjoyed my poem. Respectfully Jim And please, call me Jim. My friends do. "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
M

magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Jim and race to go lol

Okay Mr. Jim Your eldest is 21 mine is 17 so I do not think we are too much far in age. I love this poem and of course I have experienced many rose petals along my journey here on earth, many!! I love the roses, have grown them and cherished many. I hope you have many more dates like this and great write again. Of course alot of my poetry does not come from imagination it actually comes from the heart and soul of about 95 percent of my poems and blogs. Please call me magics02 or Mona I dont mind whatever you like Forgot, yes I have read alot of your poems have you read any of mine? "Determination Brings Success"
MI

Mohammad Yamin Iraqi

16 years 3 months ago

Race_9togo

A breathtaking poem -so romantic and enchanting. You have successfully drawn a most vivid picture of what went on that dinner date. Please consider ephraim crud's suggestion. -Mohammad "There is always room at the top, but there is no lift. You have to struggle"
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks Mohammad,

Its good to hear from you, as always. Yes, after some consideration, I took Ephraim's advice (thanks Ephraim); it does read better, and is more accurate too. Thank you for reinforcing his suggestion for me. I am glad that you enjoyed my poem. Walk with God, my friend, Respectfully, Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear JIm

This is packed full of sensual perfection ... only have one teeny suggestion?...satiated ?? a shorter version of this word is 'sated' ... I love the old ways of some words and for me sated ? would just give that end line more punch ... just my opinion and I am not always right ... great write keep the sensual thoughts running this is one of your best to date woooohoooooo :P love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 3 months ago

Thasnks Jayne

I will leave the "satiated" as is, I think, because I believe that the cadence is more important. Glad you enjoyed my effort. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race