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seabhac
seabhac
Feb 21, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

40….. Love

 I lay in tight gripped hand,Strung racquet bounced meTo your feet, your side of the court.I hopped pensively,You swiped in dancing anticipation.I soared over the net,Back to my own side.Dizzy and exhilarated butOver the line.
 Change of service. You gripped me in firm palm I loved it.You served me high,I hit the net and fell,Ushers rushed faithfully,Picked me up, dusted me down. I was handed back to youAgain, again you served me.Perfect positioning.I bounced so well between both courts.I tried to slow my flight, my plightWith a back spin butIt all blurred 15 love- 30 love.My head hurt.40 love.I loved the way you touched me. Game over.
 Racquet and I laid aside,You strutted away for refreshmentsI awaited another play,Another day.
— seabhac, Feb 21, 2010

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seabhac

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks Kal

Yes different for me and a bit of a fun. Yes accessable language an important part of the play of this one. I enjoyed playing tennis as a young girl and hadn't thought of how much I had retained of the ball play since then until this one bounced out. Thanks for taking the time to comment Seabhac
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

You’ve been served!Not

You've been served! Not badly, might I add. A little top spin? Added this to my favourites, Seabhac... and jumped over the net with metaphoric cigarette and light. ;-) ~Anna
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

Hi Anna

Ha ha loved the net jump , o.k. I confess I couldn't get the hang of the top spin... Hugs Seabhac
R

raskin

16 years 3 months ago

Great utilization of

Great utilization of metaphor, interesting statement on women. A woman without the perception of freewill, bounced around by a mans whims is how I read this but she is complicit with the relationship. Very good. raskin
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

Complicit yes

Awareness to change or desire to change hmmm questionable I liked what you got from this Raskin. Always a delight to have you drop by. Seabhac
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

I’m not sporty, but you

I'm not sporty, but you poem certainly gave me visions of playing on the court that I feel like I lost a pound or two...but still staying the same weight...Oh well!... it was a nice thought to be energetic...even if only in thought. Rosina xena465
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

Hi Rosina

ha ha ...were it so easy and so much fun to loose the few pounds but glad it excercised your mind with the imagination. happy Sunday Seabhac
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Seabhac:

I simply love the poem! It's really something extraordinary. I like the symbolism, and the pacing, the meaning and the words. Sincerely, Hugo
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

Hello Hugo

Lovely to hear from you this bright morning. Thank you indeed. I woke up with this one in the wee hours of the morning.So it wrote me. Best Wishes Seabhac
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Liz

This ones one of your best again thats added to the other two ... I read this one last night on my phone but couldnt vote or nominate ... which Ive rectified now :) hugs Jayne-Chloe x x
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

A sense of fun Jayne

Thanks for taking the time to come back to this. Hope things are well with you and yours. Hugs Seabhac
Carchuleto

Carchuleto

16 years 3 months ago

Seabhac!

Its been a while since we last made contact. I loved this poem and the way you personified the ball with human emotions. Being a tennis player myself, I could vividly see the action. Thanks for this amazing write! Respectfully, Carch
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

Hi Carch

Great to catch up with you but I have been visiting your new work and seeing you working hard on updating older poems makes me see how hard you are working.I keep meaning to go back and comment and I will do soon now that you have joined the welcome group and helped with the workload. Your quiet voice is getting more confident and I hope for great things for you here. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on this one. Best Wishes Seabhac
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

Good point Indi

so is that a love 15 or 15 love then.... I had just assumed she was put down as a no longer played with item ...left the personality and became ball again but hmmm you may well have raised a very good question there...thanks Seabhac
A

Atticus

16 years 3 months ago

I now have an incredible

I now have an incredible urge to take up tennis. Though I fear I would feel guilty for ever stopping. There's a play in there somewhere too...... Anyway, love the write. Very clever, and even seductive in parts. Nice work. Thanks for sharing this entertaining piece. All the best, Nathaniel
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

Hi Liz

Although my tennis days are long gone, I really enjoyed this light-hearted poem from the viewpoint of the ball. Very refreshing! Always, Cat
Z

ziggy

16 years 3 months ago

hi

i nearly missed this one , i was expecting something completly different from the title , good play on words , i played table tennis was good to lol , cheers good write ziggy
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks Ziggy

I guess all of us are experimenting these days. A more lighthearted poem to my often reflective moods. Fun ...we all need more of it. Best Wishes Seabhac
M

Mariposa

16 years 3 months ago

Wonderful metaphor!

I don't know much about tennis, but I could see that you hit the ball in the net with this poem, metaphors couldn't have been used better.
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

Hello there

Lovely to see a new face, your dueling puss in boots avitar is fun. Thank you for your kind comments . Will come and visit you soon Seabhac