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ON SHIT, ON WATER, ON MAN.

ON SHIT, ON WATER, ON MAN. 

 

Blown by wind we land at random,

on shit, on water, on man, 

not master of our destiny, 

tossed and turned 

in undecided manner, 

thrown and crushed,

built up, melted down, 

used as weapons, 

shields, a home; 

no knowledge, 

save the thoughts we learn,

coincidences' unsteered wisdom, 

rules,

we meet, 

we separate, relate a while,

until one day our life expires

just giving way to other flakes 

that fall in other years.

 

The knowing does not slake our fears

it adds to their declaim

our tiny crystal shapes, so lovely

don't end up as saints

We paint a picture pure and white

you burn me up in starlight 

late at night 

and when the sun comes out to blaze

we leave without complaint.


 


— Nordic cloud, Feb 20, 2010

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Region, Country: Oslo and Flatdal, Norway., NOR

Favorite Poets: Too daunting this.

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Stefan

16 years 3 months ago

wow

when i read your words, i see the wheel of humanity..........the seeking of it all.....this feeds my soul.............it stills my mind.........for it know the truth in your words.
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Ann

I am flabbergasted at your poem on shit on water on man .... blew me away brilliant write ... love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
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talkingcat

16 years 3 months ago

I love hearing about the

I love hearing about the laundry of humanity! you describe our washing machine world wrung out wet and innocent, and bleached warm by the sun..nice, thank you
whitetea

whitetea

16 years 3 months ago

okay. its settled i am going

okay. its settled i am going to need to read more of your writing. "on shit" i felt this was interesting. it may be odd but it is kind of interesting to me that the body can cast out some of what it doesn't need, if only our minds could do that (figurately speaking)
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

This brought a smile to my

This brought a smile to my face...What a title...naughty Ann...love it. Rosina xena465
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 3 months ago

That's what I like!

A poem that shakes out the leaves from the trees! deflowers the deadened heads, gob smaks the weary reader! Excellent use of metaphor and shock tactics Ann! We all loved it! Boni
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

Ann of NorwayIn Australia it

Ann of Norway In Australia it would wilt my willows I think. I would like to be a snowflake create a shape, a design so very special and FLY with the whims of the wind evaporating as I go and ending up as one minute part of the oceans. Maybe we are, maybe we're not! Who really knows anything? love from Ana-Nya. Thankyou all here who have commented, thank you all.
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 3 months ago

Never fear...

your knight of the realm, has seen the Ides of March! He will stem the invasion, and bring forth the hostage of Spring! I loved this one, My Queen. You know how to weave a tale. ~ Sir Gee
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sampatrik

16 years 1 month ago

Great info.I like all your

Great info.I like all your post.I will keep visiting this blog very often.It is good to see you verbalize from the heart and your clarity on this important subject can be easily observed.. Conserving Water
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Musclebuilding

15 years 11 months ago

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I am fond of poetry. When i read your poem it feels me reality of life. It teaches me a lot.I am again back to love nature. Excellent use of metaphor and shock We all loved it! Muscle building
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shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Ann

Superb write, your title is brilliant, "make the most of being 1 feather on the great tree"! and keeping a firm grip of the ground even if its with one foot! wonderful poetry much love shirl... shirley harrison