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ONE`S OWN HELL

Have stepped away misdirected
things so long coming now unexpected
that your random act of kindness for
me i have never know such utter blindness .

Familiarity's breath  contempt , once stood
fast through utter shyness, under the cloud
the sun never penetrates no rays of light
what is bright when shadows silhouette
hope! grappling choice without a voice . 

what is a tree falling when mountains 
tumble, requests laden with dying passion 
spat out like the air we breath trembling with 
fear to far apart to be near .

On the sabbath day he rests as i perish 
having no fear of hell as in it i dwell .  
— ziggy, Feb 17, 2010

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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Oh ziggy it is not hell

I hear your voice here and just want to tell you make it worthwhile to bask in the sun and laugh, laugh, laugh. Missed chatting with ya!! Good one here. Magics02 "Determination Brings Success"
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ziggy

16 years 3 months ago

hello

hello there how are you lol this is not me just a few words jumbled together," laugh and the whole world laughs with you weep and you cry alone" , cheers for the read must catch up with your words soon not been here much lately not much inspiration this year so far wat to do ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,ziggy
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Inspiration

Yes Ziggy the only one to give you inspiration is YOU no one will hand it to you as you hold it in your heart and in your life. Go out and tap your way around the town now. Write soon. Love, Magics02 "Determination Brings Success"
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ziggy

16 years 3 months ago

hi

hello there how are you , i seldom write from my own prospective i don`t know why , i hear what your saying cheers , ,,,,,ziggy
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

Hi Ziggy

The third verse did it for me.... The begining is slow and mournful. The line breaking in this is definatly different to your ususal work...it reads a little laboured ( maybe intentionally) until that 3rd verse which lifts the whole poem to a different place and the next two verses flow so beautifully. Mybe I just identify with hell more ha ha! Missed you round here Seabhac
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Ziggy

I very much agree with what Sebhac has written here. I hope that writer's block is not plaguing your doorstep and inspiration returns to you soon and often. Always, your friend, Cat