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My Dad and Me

He walked with me through the wheat fields

when I was very small.

He showed me how to rub the ripe heads

when the plants were golden and tall

so magically seeds would appear from the chaff.

It was something I’ll never forget.

An aroma of memory,

of a time of standing amongst the harvest

of millions of wheat seeds, and my Dad and me.

 

He stood with me under the Southern Cross

when the sun had gone to bed.

A blanket of starlight above us

stretched for forever over my head

reaching back over time and space.

It was something I’ll never forget.

Experiencing eternity,

and a time of standing under the cover

of millions of candles, and my dad and me.

 

We swam in the Great Ocean.

Between his legs I dove.

He taught me to do the ‘dead man’s float’.

And to teach me to swim he strove

to show me frog kick and then to float on my back.

It was something I’ll never forget.

Learning how to swim with ease,

lost in the joy of floating between

millions of water drops, and my Dad and me.

 

He woke me in the early hours

to view it on TV.

The reception, it was pretty poor

and ‘snow’ made it difficult to see

brave men thousands of miles from home.

It was something I’ll never forget.

Those men making history,

dancing up there upon the moon

while watched by millions, and my dad and me.

 

He read to and with me and explained to me often

titbits of data and facts.

He was awed by science and nature.

And taught that we paid for our acts

when we destroyed creation with technology.

It is something I’ll never forget.

The passing on to me,

well informed insights and common sense

through millions of wisdom whits, from my dad to me.

 

I sat at his service, devastated and lost.

His face no more to see.

I sit by his grave and talk to him still

about wheat, astronauts and TV

while I remember the harvest the ocean and stars.

They are something I’ll never forget.

Those marvellous things that he taught to me

absolve the grief and melancholy

of millions of tear drops, for my dad from me.

 

— judyanne, Feb 16, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

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IKnowNoBox

16 years 3 months ago

Greetings

A tribute well versed, the closing verse in each stanza draws one through this poem, a scent of lyrics.. complete with alternating chorus. In ink, David
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Just brilliant...

Did my poem to my mother inspire this one to your dad? You obviously loved your dad very much. Lovely tribute. Rosina xena465
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

I have to admit that this

I have to admit that this poem was written a while ago, but your posting of your poem prompted me to pull this one out of the mothballs. I adored my dad. Thanks Rosina. Love you. Judy
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Mine too..

The posting of my sister's poems prompted me to re-write my mum's poem. I glad that you did pull this one out...it's so lovely Rosina xena465
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

Most beautiful poem for your dear Dad.

Ann of Norway What most lovely sentiments, well thought of and placed, there is a little much repetition and the rhythm is slightly out here and there, and here and there you rhyme but other places not; so as a whole, it needs some pruning and restructuring I think to be really good. I don't know how much to do, as I started having a go and found there was a lot I would put slightly differently and its your poem and a most wonderful tribute to a very special person in your life. Repeating the 'never forget' weakens its power in a way, don't you think? Oh I'm trying to see how to help but I think you must feel the rhythm yourself and if you put on some swinging gently-loving music for your Dad to create his poem, I think the rhythm of the music might guide your mind to make a good one!! This I haven't said before, but when I write poetry I don't need to put music on, I hear the rhythm in my mind and it helps the poem have that rhythm. Some of my thoughts:- ..............rub ripe heads ............when corn was golden, tall. ...seeds fell from the chaff Between his legs I dove...........I toddled-I walked?........I dove is difficult to understand here in the corn. "He read to and with me and explained to me often"....this bit makes me feel it should be prose it might also help to first write it out in prose..I don't know. "wisdom whits, from my dad to me.....whits" whits?? Good luck to it I love its thoughts it well worth doing something with. Love and all the best Ann
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks Ann for your

Thanks Ann for your criticism. It's what I joined this site for and I appreciate it. I will look at this with your thoughts in mind at a later date when I have the energy to spend on it. For the moment it is a little stale for me as I've had it for so long. Am I not allowed to use poetic licence with 'whits'? - couldn't think of another word. Also, when I 'dove', I'm in the ocean not the wheat field. Thanks again for reading and suggesting. Love Judy
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

There is very little more

There is very little more than the image of a golden wheat field against a clear blue sky that resonates with me so absolutely. http://www.pond5.com/stock-footage/493791/wheat-field-against-a-blue-sky.html I often use that symbolically in my poems. It was also a precious recurring image in the film, *Gladiator*. I am blessed to have had a mother who was like your father. And so I became a nature and word lover. My math and scientific mind I inherited from my father. As well as the difficulties of being a child of a bipolar father. Were that all children were so gifted as you. Many children these days have totally absent fathers. Or their mothers win in court cases just because. Even though the dads are infinitely better *mothers*. ~A
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

I was a fortunate child - I

I was a fortunate child - I had a mother I loved and a father I adored and who both returned those feelings to me and my sisters and brother a thousandfold. As a result we siblings are very close still even though both parents have now gone to the wheat fields of eternity. Thank you for using the word 'gifted' in referring to me. I don't know that that is true, but it's a beautiful compliment. My mother actually gave me my love for language, my father encouraged the scientist, mathmetician and nature lover. Between the two I received a broad appreciation of what life has to offer. Thanks again for your support of my writing. Judy
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

Both of them loved nature, loved walking in the woods,

Ann of Norway My father a scientist and inventor, my mother a great lover of words and nature(too many spoken words mind you!!) Both could write poetry although my father did seldom. They were, at least my father was a little serious coming of a Victorian up-brought childhood, he being born at the end of her reign, but that didn't prevent him from donning shorts and playing golf and tennis with us laughing a lot. Both of them loved nature, loved walking in the woods, studying the botanical and insect worlds in detail. My mother on finding herself in my painting class for adults (Painting for Pleasure) had a vague look at the still life in front of her, but imagined a lot more into her paintings than was actually there. My father was more methodical and drew round the chin the ears etc. to describe a head, he tended to shake and draw a spidery wandering line concentrating very hard on it, and when I said there was some shape in the cheeks, can't you feel your way round the form, he retorted stubbornly that he didn't wish to feel. Later when I came back to have a look and see what he had drawn, it was a powerful much felt drawing in defiance. But then my mother with a water colour brush did the most delicate beautiful little sketches of scenery so she had both traits. She used to go birds nesting with her father in between hitting a golf ball to kingdom come, and he was a brilliant mathematician; I say brilliant not to brag but to point out that when he was asked how to do a sum, he would say look and write the beginning the middle and the end and say "Understand?" I hadn't done the mental part in between and didn't understand anything of it. Enough about me its your parents we are here for and they would be so happy to know that you expressed all this so beautifully for them I am sure. Love to you Judyanne, from Ann
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Just lovely

As I read I also went for this walk with you for my father was just like yours and still is.. All the things and all the love between a father and daughter, rooms not big enough to fill the words..precious Just wonderful here Judy. Mona "Determination Brings Success"
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

Mona you are lucky to still

Mona you are lucky to still have your father here. Appreciate fully while you can. I miss my dad very much. You're right, the many rooms of God's mansion wouldn't be big enough to hold the words needed, if I could find the right ones. Thanks, Judy
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R.M.Shanmugam

16 years 3 months ago

how sweet and smooth the

how sweet and smooth the narration is. an enjoyable read. shan
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

Never enough about you Ann,

Never enough about you Ann, never enough about anybody. it's where we've come from and who has guided us that makes us who we are, and knowing a little (or more) about someone assists in the understanding of that person. To know you helps me understand your writings even more and makes them even more beautiful than they are. love to you. Shan, thank you so much for caring enough to read and make such positive comments about my work. Love to you too. Judy
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Judy

I have lost my mother so feel your loss deeply and my mother was my teacher friend opponent in battle, I miss her in every breath ... Love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
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Dustyverse

16 years 3 months ago

Oh Dear......

I got almost to the last 2 verses and had to leave and come back...crying almost too hard to see....this was SO beautiful Judy!!!!!!!!!!! Your Dad must be SO proud of you....it made me stop and remember my grandmother ( who raised me )...all the things she taught, wisdom passed on, and, like your dad, simply the time she took which is the best gift of all!! Thanks for this!! Superb!!! Dusty