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luna ruins, pale runes



i dreamed of a landscape as white as milk,
your pen was poised above me
with the strength of Michelangelo
bearing down,
you were drawing me with ivory fingers
and i was heavy with alabaster breasts
the roses had turned to stone
and the marble bled,

i was disfigured with irony
all dreamers are fools
and fools are only dreamers
when poetry is a Samurai sword
and the structure of Self
falls
like an empire, like the doom
of devastation
on a prophet's tongue

the chalice of love is a poison i drink
until i am drained,
pale as the moon,
light as a feather.




— Kailashana, Feb 16, 2010

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

I could get into

I could get into sooooooooooo much trouble with all the emailing, windows open simultaneously. Thank goodness, for the most part, I'm harmless. ;-) Of course, your mind deceiveth you not. Anna hath correctedth her erroreth. love, mum p.s. blame it on my muse!
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Omg your muse is amazing …

Omg your muse is amazing ... brilliant write ... I am stuck on an ending mmmm going to see what I cant do about it shortly this one made me sit back and sigh ... when they do that I know they are V good ... but then all of yours are love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x
Mark

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

Poetess

You are a Michelangelo with pen and Allison Roe to the end ! Looks like the end of a good day there (at the end) Mark "some are born to sweet delight, some are born to endless night"
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Lunegirl

16 years 3 months ago

This poem is brilliant

This poem is brilliant Anna, It has such opulence of language and imagery. it is so beautifully sad and poinant. you have put into words such complex feelings, and done it beautifully. love miss vixy Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes
L

Lunegirl

16 years 3 months ago

Anna,its always a pleasure

Anna, its always a pleasure to read your work, because it is so full of imagery and things that make one think. It is full of emotion and done cleverly. laughing with you about the come hither smile, so not feeling it lol love always vix xxx Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

In the light of the moon the marble of statues,

Ann of Norway In the light of the moon the marble of statues, the indigo blue of past mirrors flashing with Samurai swords, with Michealangelo forms, with whiteness firm and soft as feathered t houghts you have the brush of wisdom loaded with the colours strong enough to depict the worlds greatest wonders in just a few words. Anna of Norge.
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Me too...

I say how lovely to read your great poems daily...it's a pleasure. Rosina xena465
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IKnowNoBox

16 years 3 months ago

Greetings

Previous comments are on spot. Nothing to add. In ink, Dabbler
I

IKnowNoBox

16 years 3 months ago

I have been..

where Agents of Limbo dwell Thank you for your emphatic welcome. It is good to be back at Neo, and to be able to concentrate on reading, and commenting as well as writing verse. In ink, Knower not of Box
Mark

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

we go round and round

and round in the circle game (not a game) ::doing the circle dance for Anna:: Happy Spoghtlight ! Mark "Do not ask me about poetry, I am just a poet"
whitetea

whitetea

16 years 3 months ago

Theres definitely a sadness

Theres definitely a sadness and urgency that comes along with love, love is tragic, beautiful and hopeful all at once.
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

When the moon rolls the

When the moon rolls the dice, chances are she'll show you her arse. And then it's curtains, she'll jump your bones and break your heart. ~A
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Orphani

16 years 3 months ago

Your poetry always deals out

Your poetry always deals out imagery line by line; like a card shark deals out cards, one by one, to reveal a winning hand: a straight flush of hearts. Another of your beautiful best my love. B
Esker

Esker

16 years 1 month ago

I remember Notre dame cathedral in Montreal

visited with freind/s we build these lives and our saints and madonnas of the world we have admiration [and otheres] a poem of deserved recognition and flow Thank You~ E