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a devotion to planet earth

We have to rebirth, the soul of this planetand pray it be cleansed and gentled evermore,but as nails keep piercing hands reach to smooth across her scared shroud  It has to be worshipped like the apostle to the apostles,but with a feast of celebration everydaydressed in her finest, she must be read and chronicled by scribes of all ages If her spirit cries out for a easing, for the torment that embroiders across and through her linen,rent from the abuse and torture of her kinhaving sewn by the hands, that marred her our sacrifice,

will take Millenniumsto ponder at the fibers of her cloth,for in the beginning, as the interweave of her shroudwe started to spin,Great wheels through time 
 our redemption,
to sew a forever
that rebirths from our torments  
— Seren, Feb 15, 2010

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Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

But this is only the first

But this is only the first part lol wait till the rest are finished and thennnnn say that ... love and hugs Wifey x x x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

And its black … your

And its black ... your comment has a connection to my next poem so I wont say more lol but there are three of these and I am still working on the other two ... thanks for the comment Mummy (hugs) love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Mother Nature...

How cruel mankind can be to such a wonderful creator. We should all be building, planting, and nurturing our wonderful planet and appreciate the ones who do love us...this I know, you already do. Rosina xena465
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Rosina

I don't do as much as I would like but we all do our bit dont we ... thanks for the wonderful comment huni I do appreciate the visit love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x x
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

Depth of the woven

Woven , interwoven we are all one with all that is natural, we hurt it we hurt ourselves. The last two lines make a very beautiful and sobering thought. Seabhac
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Liz

I have another two of these but different, my first try and turning my hands to something different its its always appreaciated when they are well received ... those last lines are still being fully formed I have an idea but i have to get the words just right to get the message I want although the last two lines well they are staying love Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Sinnbadd

Thanks so much for the comment and the read it is always much appreciated love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

I give you a shower of golden rain.

Ann of Norway Anna said it well and I second her comment with a shower of golden rain. Just wondered at these:- "It has to be worshiped"...............worshipped!  "a easing, " "having sown by the hands,"...." we sew " sewn? And I don't understand the Mars "that Mar’s her"... or mars? The only little thought I had was that the earth without humanity is not so much in need of a new soul, it is the humans on it that are in need. Or should change themselves to be able to tap the soul already there? Love to you dear Jayne
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dearest Ann

thanks for picking those couple of things up I was very tired I got two more nearly ready and then they will be my last poems for a week or so .... gotta have a enforced break again lol ...arghhhhh Love to you dear lady I will email you very soon love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
S

Stefan

16 years 3 months ago

wow

made me think about our actions.............i loved it. Stefan
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Stefan

Glad it got you thinking thats the first step ... thanks for the comment and read love and Hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
arja

arja

16 years 3 months ago

..beautiful, like a tribute

..beautiful, like a tribute to mother nature...love the read, nurturing and ever uplifting to ones self worth to the earth..
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Alone

It is a tribute to that and to the writers that inspired it ... I heard P.K.Page recite Planet Earth on youtube and that womans got a voice that could sooth a thousand rages ... just love it so much and I wanted to offer a tribute to her and Pablo Neruda another of my all time favourites ... this is far from done I need to tweak and think on a few lines a bit more ... this is one I dont care if it takes till I die I am going to get right ... so I appreciate your time on this one its very close to the heart kind regards love Jayne-Chloe
VX

Venus x

16 years 3 months ago

Totally AWESOME

Venus Jayne-Chloe, This is TOTALLY AWESOME...Thank you on behalf of Mother Earth. Being of Cherokee heritage, I was taught from a very young age to honor and respect Mother Earth, and all nature, so this pen is very close to my heart as well. I also love the duality of the Earth and Circle of Life,you have brought it all together perfectly, as all relates to the Creator of all this is. So well written, it brings tears.....Thank you ~Namaste~ Venus
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Venus

this is still not finished I am leaving it till when I return I will look at it again with a fresh set of eyes I am very tired at the moment and edits can wait till I get back ... we take this big ol planet for granted sometimes and I decided to make a step out and write about something that is also close to my own heart ... thanks for your wonderful comment it is much appreicated ... love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x
B

bjp

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Jayne-Chloe,

I do like how you continue to push yourself, here and in other recent poems, past the "I". The plural of millennium is millennia. Olya sends her greetings. Love and hugs, Brian
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Brian

Thanks muchly for the comment I am trying to move out of the 'i' zone lol its not easy but you know me ever trying to improve and expand ... thanks for the millennia lol I actually had that but someone told me it was the wrong term lol last time I listen to him ;) send my love and a big hug to Olya love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x