Geezer

Feb 14, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Old Things Made New...

Thinking of a way to say
What a marvelous relationship
Not really obvious
To some

I don't want to use the same old lines
The same old cliches
They aren't good enough for you
They aren't what you deserve

I want to exclaim glorious colors
Show you the stars
A palette magical
Paint the heavens

A renewal of sight
Spurred by my overwhelming emotions
Focused in depth
Do you see my heart

You make my life complete
Love fills my cup
On each and every day
I need nothing more

— Geezer, Feb 14, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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Critiques

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 3 months ago

I have NO idea what Sapphic

I have NO idea what Sapphic poetry is but this I think was definitely one of your best that are posted here, Gee...awesome!!! I quite enjoyed it...lovey without being overly romantic and that sort of sickly stuff LOL Kept it simple too...rock on!!! Peace

Geezer

16 years 3 months ago

From what I...

understand, you have to make the first and third lines mate and together express a whole thought. The whole poem slowly comes to a conclusive end. I think I got it right. Thanks for the read, keep on keeping on, ~ Gee

Geezer

16 years 3 months ago

Sir Gee's

heart is full of mush and soft stuff, but don't tell anyone. Thank you. Glad you liked it, ~ Gee

weirdelf

16 years 3 months ago

you got me, you passionate old bastard

you know how I feel about love poetry in general but this poem proves there is still a reason to try. Just a couple of word choices, IMO, could be improved I want to exclaim beautiful colors [beautiful is a crappy word in poetry. Scintillating? eternal? streaming? a spectrum of?] Spurred by emotion [emotion- which one? that word bugs me here, a bit trite] Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

Weird Elf

Ann of Norway I see what you mean by the use of beautiful here and oddly enough(!!!!!!) I agree with you, it should, in this very poem, be another word, a zany coloured word of some sort yes!! Yours-hopping in here- Ann.

Geezer

16 years 3 months ago

I agree, beautiful wasn't the right word...

So I used [glorious]. I think that word has more power, and still fits with the line. Maybe I will try another, if I find one more suitable. Thanks so much, my Queen. ~ Sir Gee

Geezer

16 years 3 months ago

Coming from you...

that is a huge compliment! I agree that beautiful is one of those overused words that I was trying to avoid. I think [glorious] says what I wanted to say, but doesn't leave one wondering what the word [scintillating] means, and still lends a majestic, sweeping air about the line. I kept emotion, and added an S along with the word [overwhelming]. Thank you, ~ Gee

magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Lovely geez gee

All I can say is bravo on this one. I loved it!! Happy Valentines Day Magics02 "Determination Brings Success"

Geezer

16 years 3 months ago

I'm glad...

that you loved it. It was made to love! Thank you so much, ~ Gee

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

AW! Top as we say in Norway, just top Sir Knight

Ann of Norway Sir Geezer the first, he gained his colours with such flourish and such verve he never swerved in constancy and love, his valour we admire, his devotion we aspire, his love for ever and a day, he's just a kind knight made that way. My colours to your plume my Knight of the realm, I curtsey to you and at the same time blush!! Your Queen Anne as elected by you. With-dare I say it- LOVE. XXXOOO

hardcorechick28

16 years 3 months ago

very nice

You are a romantic at heart!!!!!!! What a great poem for Valentines Day..did you show it to Wendy?

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Gee if I could give you a

Gee if I could give you a big hug right now I would, wonderful poem dear one ... sorry i missed it till just now ... love it though ... bravo ~! smile love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

DawningDaytripper

16 years 3 months ago

Oh your such a romantic, it

Oh your such a romantic, it must be cool to be your Valentine Gee!! I loved your sweet love poem. And if elf can admit there is a place for love poetry, then you have accomplished much!! Amen! Julie D.D.

Geezer

16 years 3 months ago

Romantic...

I hope that I show everyone just how much I love my wife. I try hard to let her know, how much I appreciate her, and when a chance comes along, like Valentines Day, I try extra hard. She wore the errings that I gave her to work, so that she could show them off to her co-workers. She loved the poem that I wrote for her. I know! I let elf know that I considered his comment high-praise! It was my first real effort at Sapphic poetry. I think I understand the concept, but really am not sure if I got it right. I hope that someone that knows, will comment. Thanks for the read, and comments. ~ Gee

hardcorechick28

16 years 3 months ago

i know

how much you love your wife!!!!! I am sure she loved the poem, she usually does. Jody does too, even though he wont admit it when I write for him. Again, well done.