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Leaving

Is this you leaving
Or my soul
Leaving my body?
The green tree of attachment
Brings forth
The thorny pain of separation...
Enfolding me
Like the Angel of Death
Embraces one in Agony!
Only one difference;
They die,
I survive...
To die
Again and again!

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Wafi

16 years 2 months ago

Thank You So Much T.

Thank you so much T, for reading and commenting. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
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Wafi

16 years 2 months ago

Than You Ana

Thank you Ana, for such a beautiful comment. My pleasure. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
washing tears

washing tears

16 years 2 months ago

Wafi! its been far too long!

Wafi! its been far too long! great write here, in its brevity i felt every word you say. thank you for sharing! -with what love could be- WT
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Wafi

16 years 2 months ago

Thank You So Much WT

Thank you so much WT, for reading my poem and commenting on it. So glad to hear from you. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Wafi ~!~!~!~! I have missed

Wafi ~!~!~!~! I have missed reading you .. and you come back with such offerings ... just one big deep .... siggggggggggggggggggh loved it my friend love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
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Wafi

16 years 2 months ago

My Dearest Jayne

My dearest Jayne, so happy to see your lovely comment. Thanks a lot for all your support and encouragment that I recieved from your great words and thoughts. Hugs Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
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Wafi

16 years 2 months ago

Wow Jayne

Wow Jayne, I didnt know I'll see it on spotlight. This poem, though writting it was a painful thing to do as I was really hurt, but it did give me happiness in form of lovely comments and appreciation from great neopoets and yeah, the spotlight. Thanks once again dear Jayne. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
faerybeki

faerybeki

16 years 2 months ago

Wafi, it’s so rare that

Wafi, it's so rare that I'm here these days and a real joy to find a new one from you :) Do hope you're well dear boy? I liked the poem but think it needs a few tweaks so suggestions to follow :) Is this you leaving (makes more sense to me with is/this swapped round) Or my soul Exiting )?) my body? (find other word for leaving maybe? bit fresher and less repetitive?) The green tree of attachment Brings forth The thorny pain of separation… Enfolding me Like the Angel of Death Embracing me (I'm a funny one but repetition might work here?) In Agony! Only one difference; (not sure the but is necessary?) They die, I survive… To die Again and again! Wafi, this is a good poem, with potential to be better, I feel, I enjoyed the read as I so often do your work and send you love and hugs as always :) more love Beki xxx
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Wafi

16 years 2 months ago

Happy To See You Are Back

Dear Beki, so happy to see you are back. Has been a long time I havent read your work. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. Thanks for the tweaking of it. I appreciate your suggestions a lot. Going to make some changes. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
xena465

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

Very gripping...

Being separated from your soul mate is like a part of you has gone forever. Never to feel complete again until a new soul captivates that missing void, which can happen. Rosina xena465
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Wafi

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks Rosina

You are right, Rosina, it hurts too much to see your loving ones separating. Thanks a lot for reading and commenting. I appreciate your thoughts. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
xena465

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

Happy Valentines

Happy Valentines Day Rosina xena465
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Wafi

16 years 2 months ago

Oh So Nice Of You Dear Rosina :)

So nice of you dear Rosina, happy valentines day to you as well Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
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Ink Dragon

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Wafi,

this is as close to perfect as it gets. How could someone choose to walk away from as gentle and caring a soul as you are? Here's to surviving and moving on! Yours, ~Nina
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Wafi

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks A Lot Dear Nina

Thanks a lot dear Nina, for your lovely comment. So glad you read and commented. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
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Atticus

16 years 2 months ago

I’m a bit late getting to

I'm a bit late getting to this one but better late than never to be sure. I love the delicate demand of this write Wafi. What you've accomplished here is not an easy root to dig up. This part especially grabs me: "The green tree of attachment Brings forth The thorny pain of separation…" All the best, Nathaniel
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Wafi

16 years 2 months ago

So Glad, Dear Nathaniel

Thanks a lot for taking the time to read and comment. So glad to hear from you, I appreciate your thoughts a lot. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
loved

loved

16 years 1 month ago

my views

ur marvellous in an unique way write poetry in your own innimitable way and to Allah i shall pray a Nobel may one day come your way accept it thus as a non poet that's me I dare to say LOVED HOWZ THIS COMMENT TOO Glad I read your poem By a stroke of error That’s my admission You were writing about nocturnal I thought otherwise But I am glad I read you And learnt from others’ comments That you’re the best Would you mind the comments? From a non- poet That’s me? Though called by all As loved Forgive me for the error If it be. Loved
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Wafi

16 years 1 month ago

Thank You, Dear Loved One

Thank you dear Loved, for taking the time to read and comment. I appreciate that a lot. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
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lyz

16 years 1 month ago

Dear dear Wafi

How sad yet true. Awesome write. Love Lyz. XX
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Wafi

16 years 1 month ago

Thank You Dear Lyz

Thank you dear Lyz, for reading and commenting. So great to see you. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
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lyz

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Wafi

Great to see you back as well. And will be waiting a new posy from you. Love to you and yours. XX
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mr.bill

16 years 1 month ago

dear wafi.. i have no words

dear wafi.. i have no words for ur poems..u rock man/././ i m one of ur bigest faannnn.. and hope see u soonnnnn,,, and learn something from u,,,
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Wafi

16 years 1 month ago

Thank You Dear Bill

So nice of you, Bill. Glad to hear you are my biggest fan :) Thanks a lot for taking the time to read and comment. I so appreciate your great thoughts about me. Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
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Wafi

16 years 1 month ago

:(( Where Did Rosina Go?

Where did Rosina Go? I hate it when I see my loving friends disappear :( Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
chumfin

chumfin

16 years 1 month ago

nice meeting you WAFI !!!

this poem is great very philosophical,emotional, a true reflections of ones dying moments, you went deep in to spiritual realm to get this, your thought are very deep, i like this. BEST REGARDS
chumfin

chumfin

16 years 1 month ago

nice meeting you WAFI !!!

this poem is great very philosophical,emotional, a true reflections of ones dying moments, you went deep in to spiritual realm to get this, your thought are very deep, i like this. BEST REGARDS CHUMFIN
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Wafi

16 years 1 month ago

Thank You So Much Dear Chumfin

Thank you so much, dear Chumfin, for taking the time to read and comment. I appreciate your great thoughts a lot. Wafi "To love too much has been the only art I used" ~Lord Byron~