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My answer to your question

''Remind me to buy milk, butter for maize 

and beer, and clean sheets,- Will our arms 

be crossed, or by our sides when 

we die?''

When this dawn's eerie boredom drives 

Victorian Machinery to a halt, hissing steam 

that turns us blind and distraught

It never dies

Screams of born spite, die, but green fear 

to do right,- Breathe, heave for breath! 

And rest your worn sign in a palm

You're alive

The view will land somewhere between us 

and the air outside, the glass that keeps 

the pink dress fixed only 

in your smile


— doorman, Feb 13, 2010

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Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Espen

How you root us somewhere between your idealic fantasies and the cold hard realities of life!The later are what interest me far more "THe LIGHT (view)will fall (land)... somewhere between us and the air outside" herewith my own unique alterations - as I see the piece! May peace be with you and between us, despite my changes ;) Best regards Boni
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Espen

Lost in the mystery ... but ever floating back, to ground us out love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

Another Espen poem of

Another Espen poem of distinction. When life takes us out, what choice do we have but to make sense of it by remembering such things as pink dresses. ~A
doorman

doorman

16 years 3 months ago

Three generous muses

A little tied up these days, but I try to write when I can. I must say that I feel very grateful to you all for reading. Thanks for being there. Sincerely yours, Espen.
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Ink Dragon

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Espen,

gosh! You did it again. I so love your casual and observant poems. Who would have thought a shopping list could amount to poetry? Yours, ~Nina
doorman

doorman

16 years 3 months ago

Shopping lists, old receipts

Shopping lists, old receipts and mail advertisement,- be vigilant. There are freebies everywhere(!) Feels a little like scavenging, though. Thanks for reading, Nina. Yours, Espen.