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Seren
Seren
Feb 13, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

forgotten already

This line is already in memoryevery thought of feeling or emotionI ever experience, will one dayvanish, like the dodo ...I am content to live in now I have fallen to ground enough times to know,I will forget the fall and it will only be on the spin of the next,that my memory will surface good thing about memoryit conveniently forgets, carving each word my wrist bonesache, from strings of memory,But I know it will not make me immortal,it just provides comfort Burning my name in the moonwill only be blown away by comets,plummeting to obliterate every curve,every dash and dot Leonardo Da Vinci speaks to me even now,and I know, one day away,only the stars will remember my gaze I brush my cheek with death'sand know that it will be enough  
— Seren, Feb 13, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Stefan

16 years 3 months ago

Hi

You touch on the wisdom of this universe, that memory is just a mind feature in this dimension, you would live for ever. great poem.
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Stefan

this was a new path or journey I found and I decided to follow it and see where it takes me ... thanks again for the read its much appreciated kind regards Jayne-Chloe
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

You will live forever

You will never be without the heart and soul of many who adore you. Never Magics02 "Determination Brings Success"
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Mona ya buggar ya made me

Mona ya buggar ya made me cry (hugs) thanks this was a difficult piece for me to finish but I finally found the answer much love dear lady and a big thank you Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

never not while I am still

never not while I am still real lol ;) he he hugs and thanks needed a laugh ,.. its been a shitty night lol love you Jayne-Chloe x x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Annie

I have finished this one ... and I have to hold something back of myself lol or it would all come spilling out like a madhatters tea party ... and make no sense .. it will all come out in good time and I dont push it anymore, I let them come to me lol watch this space I am working on one I quite like at the moment lol;) Glad you enjoyed it hun take care love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

Oh how you shine, you ARE a star,

Ann of Norway Oh how you shine, you ARE a star, you need no addition of stars, you shine for us all here with your deliberate and beautiful philosophy of life, you paint for us pictures, small parables of existence, teaching us so gently, with such delicacy of expression that we feel we find those most beautiful shells, those tiny pink ones, opaque and so very very lovely, on the beach of our pages each time we find one of your poems, they come, like the shells, with the ebb and flow of the tides in your mind, they pulsate out to us and are left there for us to find, and when we do we treasure them as our own, we thereby treasure you, your heart and life, your love, your attitude of positive thinking and we bow in awe at you, yes we do, and now its me who has tears pouring down her cheeks, dear dear sweet and wonderful Jayne you are so so special here, how can we say it, give of ourselves to strengthen you and show you that we love you? Bon chance toujours! Ann. Happy Valentine's day.
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dearest Ann

Your comments in themselves are inspiration I always count myself lucky to have met and got to know some of the most lovely people the world over ... and you always lift me ... always,.... thanks for your beautiful comment you made me tear up its nice to know you guys are here love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x x x
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

Ann of NorwayLeonardo bought

Ann of Norway Leonardo bought caged birds, with the little money he had when young, and he set them free, you have been one of those birds and he has set you free, so now even you can fly, wonderful isn' it? Love again and again and again Ann
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

I think thats a wonderful

I think thats a wonderful thought to have been one of the birds he set free, want to know something funny ?? my brother raced pigeons when I was a child hes a lot older than me lol and I let them all out feeling sorry for them ... imagine my horror when they all came back ... I was six thinking I had liberated all those birds and every single one of them came back ... lol my dad sat me down that night and explained they are trained to come back ... you know what my answer was ?? 'daddy do they ever forget?' lol ... I just didnt like them in the cages ... and still remember that all these years later love millions of hugs dear lady , Jayne-Chloe x x x
SR

Stuart Reiss

16 years 3 months ago

WOW what a wonderful write....and Oh so true !!!

Aww Jayne,,,this is my fav of all your poems I have read... There is Emotion of a quiet but strong nature in this poem... A coming of age if you like that speaks volumes. Its very inspiring and I loved it... YOU GOT MY NOM for this one WELL DONE !!! Best regards Stu :-)
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Stuart

Coming of age ... I like that and I think you maybe right ... I have matured in my words and I am always looking for new ways to express myself in these writes ... thanks for your support and comment it really is much appreciated ... you guys lift me when I feel like I dont have anything left ... theres always a little bit left lol (hugs) love Jayne-Chloe x x x
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 3 months ago

A question of self worth?

We are all but blinks in the light of the stars, and yet the value of our living that very awareness. You matter Jayne....you matter to many who are sometimes blinded and sometimes comforted by the gentle glow of your very own unique light. Shine on Seabhac
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Liz

I have become reflective of late and this one came out of the blue I had written the first few lines and then yesterday well the rest just poured out ,.. thanks for your support hun its always been much appreciated love Jayne-Chloe x x x
yenti

yenti

16 years 3 months ago

Little Lady

The time passes and hurt becomes a memory as you know, the Spirit you are is unhurtable and yours has learnt so much in giving to others your words and thoughts, even when the world of physical things is set to test you time and time again. We live to learn then some, to enhance a Spirit that is a wonderful thing, the beauty of this thing we hold inside surpasses all of our thougts of beauty and understanding. Thank you Little lady of this earth that you walk with us each day and we cherish each day of our journey together. You know that we will walk together for always and as there is no time it will have to be a trip to eternity and then beyond. You have a lovely Valentines day with those that are close to you and smell the Roses, Yours Ian.T
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dearest Ian

You have been one of my longest friends here and I always think of you and Anne like family ... your hurts are mine and vice versa ... we have traveled some rough roads the last twelve months but it was always walking together and thats made all the difference for me,having the support that I've had, someone up there must have known I would need it ;) love to you both Jayne-Chloe x x x x
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Beautifully written.....

Stars are not gone...5 stars sent for you... Happy Valentines Day Rosina xena465
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Rosina

And a very Happy Valentines day to you dear lady ... ours is already over here lol we are in the next day ... thanks for the read and the comment I appreciate it very much, much love Jayne-Chloe x x x
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

I have come to this poem a

I have come to this poem a few times, liking it but not sure why. One day even the universe will only be a memory, but it is my belief that we will still be around to remember it. LOL Judy
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Judy

Its funny I sometimes find poems I like but cant put my finger on why ... its just something hits the right chord and well they wont leave us alone till we do pay attention lol ... thanks for the comment so glad you liked this one I am going through a bit of a change in my writing and not everyones going to like them but thats cool lol its all about the learning love and hugs Jayne-Chloe