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now that your gone

three crosses on the ground
all around me, no sound
queit earth, a sacred place
only memories of a face
i feel the sun shine on me,
a small summer breeze
flowers that have collected dust
pieces of iron incased in rust
solitude, what do i feel?
a need to remember you were real?
name on a marker made of glass
when all good things come to pass
why do i come here, pray tell
"it numbs a living Hell"
— mardy3, Feb 13, 2010

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Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

I love that last line …

I love that last line ... 'it numbs a living hell'(god I so relate to that line sometimes) ... well done will look for more from your pen ... kind regards Jayne-Chloe
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

I too love that last line,

I too love that last line, also 'a need to remember you were real'. The whole work - theme and language - is powerful for anyone who has lost a loved one - and isn't that all of us? Great poem.
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

The graveside

Thi is a strong write and I know how hard it is when you are right there at the graveside of one so dear. Very thougth out poem and strong wording. I seen a couple of spellcheck things as in: encased and quiet are misspelled Other then that it is very good magics02