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I could sit and piss and moan I guess,

and you would expectthey will expect some groaning but I cant and I wontcause i have better things to dowith something as precious as time,you want me to lay down and dieagain and again but I wont and cantbecause pure stubbornnessdrives me to succeed you will never get what you want by default maybe but not because I let it  
— Seren, Feb 11, 2010

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About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Victorclaude

Victorclaude

16 years 3 months ago

“I could sit and piss and

"I could sit and piss and moan I guess, and you would expect they will expect some groaning" And what good would it do? Not much. Very cool write. Victor
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Victor

Glad you liked this one ... it was different but yeah I thought why NOT lol ;) love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

Hey Janie, to whom doth you

Hey Janie, to whom doth you speaketh? Shall I venture an extraordinary guess? Do I get three? One for pissing, one for groaning and one for moaning? I'll take moaning any time, and so endeth my *Great Expectations*. ;-) ~A
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Mum

PMSL you can have as many as you like but I hedge to bet you wont need them ;) and the answer is 'noone that would lower themself to listen to me :O lmao hahaha love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Neon

Exactly is right ;) kind regards love Jayne-Chloe
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 3 months ago

Reminded me of...

A poem I wrote awhile back, called Wrecking the Temple. I'd guess you haven't abused your self like I have, but the thought is still the same. We aren't ready to give it up yet! I like the image of getting over on the big D. Keep on keeping on, ~ love and higgest bugs, ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Gee

When I was young nothing could harm me lol I have screws in my ankle back and hip ... so yes I did punish my body just maybe in a different way ... lol ... you take care my friend and make sure you rest its good to hear that your doing better love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

Ann of NorwayYou know the

Ann of Norway You know the New York business man who pissed in pot while saying his prayers at night, he said "Time is money"!!! And E was at the doctor many years ago and was asked for a sample...he did and came out of the room balancing the glass jar full to the very brim and the doctor said " You mustn't take this place for a ordinary pissoir!" He had a good sense of humour. You're like my mother strong willed, well my father too, stubbornly hanging on to his independence, even told my mother "I can roll the wheel chair," then promptly went out of the shop backwards where a car just missed him, he had to be quieter after that!!! I think the last 20yrs of my mother's life, on her own, were due to her will, otherwise with ALL that was wrong with her...well...! Always cheerful too, she didn't like others to suffer for her, so put on a bold face. Smile I hope or you can tell me to piss off! Just entertaining folks. My love as aye Ann XXXOOO
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dearest Ann

AS IF I would evvvvvvvvver tell one of my favourite people to piss off dear Queen ,.. you just made me smile moons lol and I had a good laugh too,so thank you for that I am short on time today so I will talk to you later tonight ... love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Jayne:

There are times when stubborness is the greatest asset we are blessed with. That is translated courage, hard optimism, in my private dictionary. Nice job! Love&Hugs, Sincerely, Hugo
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Hugo

It is my curse and my blessing my stubborness lol but I think at present we will count it a blessing, so glad you liked this one ... it was different but I thought it wasnt bad so I posted it love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
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Stefan

16 years 3 months ago

Hi

When we arrive at a place that we understand that all that happens in life are but a game we play, that it is only a ego trip of the mind. We find rest in all. This is why i read poems, to see the heart of mankind expressed in words.
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Stefan

Thankyou for your insightful comment ... you have far seeing eyes and have got to the crux of my poem ;) kind regards love Jayne-Chloe
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Annie

Thank you so much for the read I am glad you liked it ... one love Jayne-Chloe x x
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Lunegirl

16 years 3 months ago

loving the gritty first

loving the gritty first coupla lines best ; ) roll and wallow and wail, till her face melted off in a pool of self pity. LOL that inspired a funny vision. Simplicity says i all Jayne, love to you my lovely vix Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Vix

If I get it down in time I ahve a poem lol you might like .. going to post tonight or tomorrow depends on how much freetime I get to myself tonight lol (not much usually) I have to write at night with four teenagers and a hubby and 9 cats 2 dogs and a dimond python snake lol I dont get much time to myself ... oh and I forgot the kids friends and alllll their friends ... yep its a crazy house but full of love mostly so its ok I can live with it lmao glad you liked the simplicity of this one ... it was something someone said to me ... bloody annoyed me and this was my answer the cleaner version, wasnt game to post the first version ... ribald would have turned it down lmfao ~! you take care I am rambling here lol sorry love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
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Lunegirl

16 years 3 months ago

lmao to, bless you, ramble

lmao to, bless you, ramble away, im good at that. Ill keep an eye out for your post and one in to sleep with for you lol. 9 cats!!!! i thought i was pushing it with 3 lol. friends of the kids always fill our house, we have a tiny tiny flat, but i love it when laughter fills it ; ) happy thoughts to you love vix xx Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes