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One Static Love (Heaven Grounds)

i've been gone through many love stories
been used to heartaches and heartbreaks,
yes,mystery it is to see the girl i want to live with
the girl on the cathedral who i cannot just forget..

the love i had wasn't part of any switches..
and not defined by any holes or stitches,
time has in itself the reasons why its you all and still..
hoping soon somehow you'll feel the same..

will you ever give me some space in your heart?
or will this poem end with a broken heart?
will you even let me hold your hands?
to make you know i love you with open hands?

can i be your soft pillow when you go to sleep?
can i be your blanket for the midnight wind?
can i be those pocketbooks you love to read?
can i be your cellphone that you never miss to have with?

whether i will have the days all but cold!
or will met fate so odd and untold!
i really love this girl! please back me up Lord!!
let her love me with a single word!

i know there's someone better that what i am,
but my love is greater than him,
so now i shall bury my shame,
for my heart yearns for the claim..
— whitescatter, Feb 11, 2010

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Region, Country: Laguna, PHL

Favorite Poets: William Shakespeare And the NeoPoet Family

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16 years 3 months ago

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does not appeal to me but you managed to bring me back to my idealizing adolescence so there is emotional truth here. Stanzas 3 and 4 are your make-it or break-it stanzas, I think. If they are cliche-filled, you'll lose your reader but if they're inventive and, maybe, comical, you'll win the reader. I really liked the images of the pocket novels and cell phone, maybe you could play a bit more with the others.